A Witch's Inheritance

Player Rating5.88/8

"#88 overall, #9 for 2018"
based on 217 ratings since 01/08/2018
played 4,156 times (finished 276)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Your mother was cast aside by your father for certain 'unnatural' practices. Raised by your overly strict father, you always felt as though you didn't belong in the village, and the way the other villagers treated you didn't help. So, what are you going to do about it?

~December Contest prompt #34: The protagonist is the village whore. But she's also a witch!~ 

(This story sort of ran away with itself and I ran out of time, so I hope there's enough 'whore' and 'witch' in it to qualify.)

Player Comments

Wasn’t quite sure what to expect from you initially. It was little surprising that you picked the witch whore topic, but you did and made it work for you.

The writing was consistently good. You described everything pretty well. The protagonist was fleshed out along with the various characters she meets in the various branches which you also had enough of for the story not to be linear.

I know one of the complaints I’ve heard about this one is that it’s mostly a series of unfortunate events and the protagonist seems to be on the receiving end of continually getting kicked in the face.

While it’s probably the sadistic side of me (Which is all of me) that was one of the main reasons why I liked this story. Everything that happens is just one bad thing after another that I couldn’t help but laugh and enjoy! While that probably wasn’t your intention, that doesn’t matter, I liked what you wrote for my reasons.

And besides all that, there are a few paths where she does okay, so its not all bad.

It was a real shame that you didn’t finish this one in time for the contest because this probably would have gotten at least third place from me.
-- EndMaster on 6/23/2018 4:07:06 AM with a score of 0
Looks like a good intro and description of the story. I am always at least slightly put off when I read that the author “ran out of time.” I understand that may have been the case for a contest entry, but the author can always take the story down after the contest is over and finish it. I have seen many authors take that route. Either that, or simply live with what’s published, make it a complete story, and leave that line out.

I like the first page and the start of the story. I like the italics showing me that this is the past and setup for the story. I really like that I have a number of options on the first page as well. From a quick glance there, it looks like these options really have huge effects on the story, which is really great! Of course, because of those varied options, there appear to be a number of ways to end the story really quickly. I do appreciate the options and that they don’t lead back to one another with no effect, but some of the endings really do appear almost too soon.

I like the writing and the story. There are lots of good ideas in here, and I really like all the branching. Some of the pages are longer and have good dialogue and descriptions in them. I find it interesting that almost all of the endings allow me to restart, except the Peaceful ending. Nicely done, I do encourage you to write more, whether it is with this story or another!
-- Ogre11 on 5/16/2018 3:52:41 PM with a score of 0
I don't know if on purpose but somehow there are some familiar stories reference. Like the girl with matches. I know a story such as that. Maybe I am looking too much into it.
-- PH4N70M on 8/23/2019 6:16:17 AM with a score of 0
nice job, i enjoyed the story and i thought the choices you listed were good.
-- OLivers2 on 5/9/2019 11:55:18 AM with a score of 0
It was really good and was very descriptive
-- MongooseGirl on 5/2/2019 2:09:49 PM with a score of 0
Wow, just wow. That was pretty good although I didn't see too much in the witch's story.
-- Unkindcrab on 3/9/2019 8:10:04 PM with a score of 0
Awsome
-- Kay on 12/15/2018 8:43:25 AM with a score of 0
Amazing could use more detail
-- Dd on 11/27/2018 6:26:26 PM with a score of 0
I don't have much to say, other than that was a really great experience! I love how everything is so well explained, and each ending gets you a different sort of satisfaction.
-- chris091104 on 11/26/2018 11:01:36 PM with a score of 0
ok, so honestly it was a bit long. i dont think long works well for screens.
-- ,.,.,.,.,. on 10/18/2018 9:33:01 PM with a score of 0
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