Albus Potter:The next Generation Year 1

Player Rating3.57/8

"#632 overall, #26 for 2007"
based on 410 ratings since 09/17/2007
played 7,345 times (finished 384)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

There is spoilers. If you haven't finished the book do not play. But It's your choice.

It's Albus Potter, and well no one can actually say what this first year can do. He is Harry Potter's son. The world of witches and wizards are safe for now. But for how long. Enter the story of Albus Potter.

Player Comments

This is absolute garbage. Your storygame is inaccurate, badly written, and stolen. I really want to get this unpublished, as I've seen many stories that you stole ideas from, so that's not even really your storygame at all.

Normally, I'd save the grammar stuff for the end, but I'm going to bump it up this once, because this was bad. Everything's wrong, the spelling is wrong, the grammar is terrible, and it absolutely kills the storygame, before you ever release another story, proofread it, and then have someone else proofread it, because you obviously have very little writing experience.

As stated above, the ideas were stolen. Somehow, though, you managed to still mess it up by writing it so badly that I wanted to just quit after the first two pages. Nothing about the storygame drew me in, and it honestly got worse from there. There's hardly any plot, and the writing is very choppy and confusing to read at some points. There was no flow; nothing really good at all.

It's too short as well. Rowling wrote each book in several hundred pages, and a few even ventured toward 1,000 pages, so this falls well below acceptable. This honestly deserves a 0/8, but I can't even give you that. On a final note, I hope you never planned on writing a sequel to this crap. 1/8
-- Nyctophilia on 11/5/2017 4:19:15 PM with a score of 0
I can't even think of where to start. First of all, Harry HATES the Ministry, that's not how the sorting hat works, you don't get choices on your schedule, listed there, you don't get divination until you're a 3rd year, in the situation with Kellen and McGonagall, McGonagall would know what to do. Also there were lots of grammar/spelling errors and you weren't clear about a lot of statements.
-- koolkat2023 on 2/14/2016 10:21:19 PM with a score of 0
This is an absolute shit stain.
-- ugilick on 3/28/2021 3:59:03 AM with a score of 0
Bad spelling and punctuation, poor quality fanfic
-- Drarryisthebest on 3/8/2021 4:02:59 PM with a score of 0
not bad
-- jdla3 on 12/3/2020 10:54:52 PM with a score of 0
Not terrible. Great if you want to know more about Albus. Not bad. You should do some on other stories.
-- Someone over the rainbow on 6/4/2020 4:08:30 PM with a score of 0
-- garchona on 2/26/2020 9:59:58 AM with a score of 0
awsome game
-- garchona on 2/11/2020 2:25:26 PM with a score of 0
I hate it you bitch
-- ella grace balck on 10/18/2019 11:05:39 PM with a score of 0
It was bad
-- Rose on 9/23/2019 8:10:24 PM with a score of 0
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