Albus Potter:The next Generation Year 1

Player Rating3.74/8

"#395 overall, #30 for 2007"
based on 354 ratings since 09/17/2007
played 5,581 times (finished 293)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

There is spoilers. If you haven't finished the book do not play. But It's your choice.

It's Albus Potter, and well no one can actually say what this first year can do. He is Harry Potter's son. The world of witches and wizards are safe for now. But for how long. Enter the story of Albus Potter.

Player Comments

This is absolute garbage. Your storygame is inaccurate, badly written, and stolen. I really want to get this unpublished, as I've seen many stories that you stole ideas from, so that's not even really your storygame at all.

Normally, I'd save the grammar stuff for the end, but I'm going to bump it up this once, because this was bad. Everything's wrong, the spelling is wrong, the grammar is terrible, and it absolutely kills the storygame, before you ever release another story, proofread it, and then have someone else proofread it, because you obviously have very little writing experience.

As stated above, the ideas were stolen. Somehow, though, you managed to still mess it up by writing it so badly that I wanted to just quit after the first two pages. Nothing about the storygame drew me in, and it honestly got worse from there. There's hardly any plot, and the writing is very choppy and confusing to read at some points. There was no flow; nothing really good at all.

It's too short as well. Rowling wrote each book in several hundred pages, and a few even ventured toward 1,000 pages, so this falls well below acceptable. This honestly deserves a 0/8, but I can't even give you that. On a final note, I hope you never planned on writing a sequel to this crap. 1/8
-- Nyctophilia on 11/5/2017 4:19:15 PM with a score of 0
I can't even think of where to start. First of all, Harry HATES the Ministry, that's not how the sorting hat works, you don't get choices on your schedule, listed there, you don't get divination until you're a 3rd year, in the situation with Kellen and McGonagall, McGonagall would know what to do. Also there were lots of grammar/spelling errors and you weren't clear about a lot of statements.
-- koolkat2023 on 2/14/2016 10:21:19 PM with a score of 0
-- Harpie on 3/10/2018 1:48:28 PM with a score of 0
its badly written I'm soo sorry I don't really do this but it was bad
-- bookwizard93 on 3/6/2018 11:17:05 AM with a score of 0
At least read some of the books before making a fanmade story on the Harry Potter Series. If not all, you should have at least read Cursed Child. And even if you did not want to read the books, a quick san of the Harry Potter Wiki by Wikia - www. - reveals your lack of basic Harry Potter knowledge.

Here are a few of your glaring mistakes:-
- Albus is a Slytherin, not a Gryffindor.
- The Sorting Hat works by a very different mechanism.
- Scorpius Malfoy never trash talked about Harry, rather he was an admirer of Harry Potter.
- Albus sat with Scorpius on the Express, not with Rose.
- The Black family is extinct in the male line, it continues in the female line through the descendants of Bellatrix (Lestrange), Narcissa (Malfoy), Andromeda (Tonks), the Weasleys and the Potters. Thus, Kellen Black should not exist.
- And for that matter, who is Kellen Black's aunt and uncle?
- Severe Grammatical Errors

There must be several more, but I lost interest after the first 2 pages.
This could have been far better if you had done your homework.
-- RowenaRavenclaw1211 on 3/5/2018 5:53:47 AM with a score of 0
Plz you are embarrassing her,you are embarrassing JK ROWLING FOR GOD'S SHAKE
-- NO! on 2/4/2018 11:56:52 AM with a score of 0
Now this was great! It has a great storyline keep up the great work!
-- a person on 1/25/2018 8:57:43 PM with a score of 0
-- Drew on 11/22/2017 7:23:16 PM with a score of 0
It wasn't very accurate. Albus is a Slytherin and is good friends with Scorpius (Apologies if this did change later on in the story. I kinda started skimmjng through it). The Sorting Hat does take background and preferences into account but certainly wouldn't have based it all on history.

The grammar and punctuation needed work, but other than that it was okay.

With a little corrections and work it would be better ;)
-- andi0316 on 4/15/2017 6:53:17 PM with a score of 0
The game is awesome but it spoils the books and movies
-- HPFreak on 4/5/2017 6:22:54 PM with a score of 0
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