Albus Potter:The next Generation Year 1

Player Rating3.73/8

"#394 overall, #30 for 2007"
based on 345 ratings since 09/17/2007
played 5,367 times (finished 284)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

There is spoilers. If you haven't finished the book do not play. But It's your choice.

It's Albus Potter, and well no one can actually say what this first year can do. He is Harry Potter's son. The world of witches and wizards are safe for now. But for how long. Enter the story of Albus Potter.

Player Comments

This is absolute garbage. Your storygame is inaccurate, badly written, and stolen. I really want to get this unpublished, as I've seen many stories that you stole ideas from, so that's not even really your storygame at all.

Normally, I'd save the grammar stuff for the end, but I'm going to bump it up this once, because this was bad. Everything's wrong, the spelling is wrong, the grammar is terrible, and it absolutely kills the storygame, before you ever release another story, proofread it, and then have someone else proofread it, because you obviously have very little writing experience.

As stated above, the ideas were stolen. Somehow, though, you managed to still mess it up by writing it so badly that I wanted to just quit after the first two pages. Nothing about the storygame drew me in, and it honestly got worse from there. There's hardly any plot, and the writing is very choppy and confusing to read at some points. There was no flow; nothing really good at all.

It's too short as well. Rowling wrote each book in several hundred pages, and a few even ventured toward 1,000 pages, so this falls well below acceptable. This honestly deserves a 0/8, but I can't even give you that. On a final note, I hope you never planned on writing a sequel to this crap. 1/8
-- Nyctophilia on 11/5/2017 4:19:15 PM with a score of 0
I can't even think of where to start. First of all, Harry HATES the Ministry, that's not how the sorting hat works, you don't get choices on your schedule, listed there, you don't get divination until you're a 3rd year, in the situation with Kellen and McGonagall, McGonagall would know what to do. Also there were lots of grammar/spelling errors and you weren't clear about a lot of statements.
-- koolkat2023 on 2/14/2016 10:21:19 PM with a score of 0
-- Drew on 11/22/2017 7:23:16 PM with a score of 0
It wasn't very accurate. Albus is a Slytherin and is good friends with Scorpius (Apologies if this did change later on in the story. I kinda started skimmjng through it). The Sorting Hat does take background and preferences into account but certainly wouldn't have based it all on history.

The grammar and punctuation needed work, but other than that it was okay.

With a little corrections and work it would be better ;)
-- andi0316 on 4/15/2017 6:53:17 PM with a score of 0
The game is awesome but it spoils the books and movies
-- HPFreak on 4/5/2017 6:22:54 PM with a score of 0
It doesn't go flow, doesn't make sense together, story line is messed up, but it could get better. Wrtiting isn't structured well
-- Cinderflight on 2/6/2017 5:05:36 PM with a score of 0
This was not a good game. After a bit I ended up skipping through most of the writing, the story was dull, the grammar was incorrect, the ideas were stolen, unoriginal, and even half the Harry Potter facts were incorrect. Why would you write a storygame about Harry Potter if you don't know half the facts?
-- Ivypool162 on 12/11/2016 10:41:31 AM with a score of 0
The storygame is full to brim with spelling mistakes and the whole story is an ugly, choppy mess. The some of the ideas for the story were stolen, as I read a fan fiction on another site with some similar events, which lowers your rating even more than usual.

I was practically dieting of boredom, and I really have nothing good to say about the storygame. The whole thing is terrible, and how it has a rating of four amazes me. My only thought is that people really like Harry Potter and boosted the rating because they really loved it and want to see more Harry Potter books.

Please understand that there is no need to rush a game. There is no deadline, no time limit, nothing that causes you to have to publish shit on the website. In the future,I see this quickly falling to a one and then deleted.
-- Naomi14 on 10/22/2016 6:27:58 PM with a score of 0
cool game dude whens next one
-- kaleb on 10/6/2016 7:23:17 PM with a score of 0
Nice! I really liked how at the end, no matter what spell you used, you didn't die! Or, well, " albus" didnt die.
-- Ginnyweasleybooklove on 8/8/2016 9:56:27 PM with a score of 0
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