Alone in the Forest

Player Rating3.50/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 85 ratings since 02/22/2015
played 607 times (finished 90)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

A poor mouse is all alone. He is very lonely and wants only for someone to play with him. Will you help him find some friends?

I would also like to thank jamescoker1226 for looking over this and helping me out. Also, if you can, leave a comment below of, well, just what you would like to see. Like, if there is a certain mistake I should fix or what kind of stories you want. Let me know below what you think.

Player Comments

As soon as I read the first page I thought I wouldn't enjoy this. The wording of it just felt strange and choppy, and the plot was introduced rather sloppily.

However, as I started reading, I began to enjoy myself. I'll admit that the writing didn't hit me as an 8/8 masterpiece, but this had a certain charm to it that kept me entertained :)

I liked the animal perspective thing, especially as being a mouse. It really gives an interesting point of view because of many things about mice, such as being small.

I feel like you tried to add emotion (such as feeling lonely), but despite that, it wasn't fleshed out very well. Detail and character development are like the cupcake, and the emotion is the frosting. You can't exactly expect readers to feel emotion for a character they know hardly anything about other then their species.

There wasn't a lot of branching, but there was a little I suppose.

Overall, enjoyable in my opinion but needs some work :D

-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 12:04:23 AM
I guess this is an alright kids' game, but not much so interactive fiction. You have shown you can write fairly decently and understand that interactive fiction requires choices, but specifically the choices need to be fleshed out moreso. The game needs to be less linear and open to more branches with varying plotlines. For example, only the 'retire as a hermit' and the snake paths were varied in the slightest bit. This needs to be less linear and the story should be worked upon.

I also feel like the world we are in needs to be expanded upon. Where are we exactly -- a forest? A jungle? But then why/where are the/re elephants? And there's only so limited places where monkeys can live in the wild. Point is, you need to be more descriptive in the scenery and setting departments. This isn't a bad game, just needs more work.
-- FazzTheMan on 7/5/2015 1:30:07 AM
Ah finding a friend mouse at a snake den, so what did we learn about snakes today? They really like mice! ;D
-- TestingJest on 12/11/2017 11:38:32 PM
it was SO CUTE!!! i tried to save a female mouse from a snake in hopes of friendship and it worked! YAY!
-- thebigE on 7/2/2016 2:45:06 PM
A very cute and well written narrative.
-- TharaApples on 6/21/2016 7:34:24 PM
It's very cute!
-- Seto on 6/15/2016 9:43:33 PM
I like that this story is descriptive and funny.
-- Frontierloc on 12/27/2015 2:11:33 PM
-- corgi213 on 9/1/2015 7:41:43 PM
It was good and my ending wasn't bad so I guess I could say...GOOD JOB!!!??
-- annaisawesome on 8/26/2015 6:37:03 PM
I didn't like it very much, also it seems like James did all the work.
-- lollolol on 3/11/2015 3:47:42 AM
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