Falling Asleep

Player Rating4.27/8

"#281 overall, #32 for 2013"
based on 104 ratings since 12/27/2013
played 1,135 times (finished 123)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Tags

This is my first story. But I think I've got a good grasp on this.

There is only one ending, but many ways to get there. 

Yes, I know it's short, but I'm looking for feedback. 

Player Comments

I liked this story. It was short but for the context of what was happening, it worked out well. I also liked that we really don't know if it was his dreams in the end OR if it was real. The coffee shop could be a dream for all we know!
-- AppDude27 on 3/3/2014 12:19:33 PM
The writing style is great, and it communicates the story well. If you decide to make a sequel out of this you should definitely add more background (what else is happening outside of the story?) and character development (who is the main character? What does he do? etc.).
-- Allusional on 1/4/2014 2:15:02 PM
It's good, especially if it's your first. The text has a nice flow to it and it has a blending quality between dreaming and reality. I would have liked (perhaps it is simply the ending I got) to go deeper into the plot. Why is the main character having these dreams? What exactly do they mean? Are they insane? Or is it something deeper? If anything I would say that you may even be able to pull a sequel out of this. Good job, keep writing.
-- AceofRoses on 1/2/2014 1:42:49 PM
This was pretty good but definitely could’ve had something more interesting happen at the end.
-- Teagan on 2/14/2019 9:02:39 AM
mixed feelings
-- Geordie on 2/14/2019 5:07:43 AM
Pretty good for a first game.
-- Faervel on 2/11/2019 12:04:40 PM
The story has a very nice atmosphere, although a couple titles seem a little silly and out of place.
-- Lockirby2 on 2/10/2019 9:01:15 PM
You got a nom! on the nomnom scale! You did a great job describing the scenes/setting, but my only complaint is that it's kinda short and didn't grab my attention. Good writing skills and keep up the good work!
Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
eh!=1-1.9 stars
meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
nomnom=4-4.9
nomnomnom!=5-6
-- Cake_Oi on 1/29/2019 3:09:29 PM
It was good. I liked the writing style; it was very engaging. But that's the reason for my low rating. Nothing I chose to do mattered. It all ended with rape and murder. Because I suffer from PTSD from an incident I won't discuss, the subject matter was particularly triggering for me. If I was warned before playing, I wouldn't have (although I didn't need to finish the game, but I also have OCD issues). If you made a game that was less traumatic and dark, I'd play it. :)
-- Anonymous on 8/28/2017 11:15:10 PM
It's alright, it's quite detailed... I'll be sure to play it again!
-- Chickdove on 3/26/2017 9:57:21 PM
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