Lon Lon's Melodies

a Fantasy by Jolt

Player Rating3.03/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 23 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Tags

A thrilling adventure in which you use your mystical powers to defeat the evil Gantrovanti and save your dad.

Player Comments

This is a great concept and I actually felt a bit excited when I initially started reading. It kind of reminds me of Loom in a weird way, and I liked Loom for the concept, even though the story itself lacked. Unfortunately, the execution here also leaves a lot to be desired.

I like the instruments, I like the powers, I liked how the trumpet had a double edged power ... but the story was short, a bit cliché, lacked in detail over-all, and you weren't consistent. I picked the trumpet, but you gave me the option of using the ocarina.

You also gave me the powers of life and death with the trumpet, but my father died and even though "alive and dead are just titles to me" you gave me no option but to either accept his death and go home or get revenge.

I mean ... what? You need to either be clearer on the rules of your world or you need to STICK to the rules of your world.

Do keep trying, though. I think you have the makings of something really good here, -really- good, but it needs a lot of work.
-- Kiel_Farren on 1/29/2015 7:17:44 PM with a score of 0
At the beginning you had to choose one instrument but throughout the story I just used most of them...
-- Mardox on 6/26/2015 9:10:13 PM with a score of 0
not slightly funer then homework, homework I better
-- anna on 3/6/2015 9:34:33 PM with a score of 0
A very good story
-- Jolt on 1/31/2015 9:09:17 PM with a score of 0
A fun idea but could go a lot further and be a lot longer. How did I get all these magical instruments and why is there not one that makes me invisible? :) I like this but if it were longer it would be better :D
-- Will11 on 1/29/2015 7:43:34 PM with a score of 0
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