Losing and Gaining Love
a
Love & Dating
by
SwazzleJuj
Player Rating
4.06/8
"#420
overall
, #34 for
2012
"
based on
223 ratings
since 06/26/2012
played 4,833 times (finished 245)
Story Difficulty
1/8
"no possible way to lose"
Play Length
2/8
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
Maturity Level
5/8
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
Tags
Part of Series
Serious
A young man relives the short time he had with the love of his life before she was taken from him.
Player Comments
Good story! Way too short and let's be honest, "to be continued" is SUCH AN UNPROMISING ANNOYING CLICHE- AND it's an excuse to publish an unfinished story. So because what you already have is really good, it just needs expansion, please do that!!!!
One more thing- I liked the way I heard a great writer put this, and I'd like to share this little wisdom with you as you write more games in the Love and Dating category:
Don't ask your readers to be sad.
Just as an example, the part that you write "happy memory" and later "sad memory" is literally telling the reader that you're trying to set up a scene with a certain tone that will invoke very touchy, personal emotions. As writers it's our job to put emotion that we've personally connected with from real life experience into our fictional story. Once you do that, the deep seated emotion will come out naturally and your readers will be able to share those emotions with you as they play your game.
Thanks and please keep writing! :)
--
AandEcoproductions
on 2/12/2016 7:06:01 PM with a score of 0
I need more of this story it was wonderful
-- Blake Griffin on 10/27/2019 3:12:56 AM with a score of 0
Rlly sweet! Madee me cry a llittle bit... :(
Pls make Part 2! I'm DYING to find out what happens next! ^-^
-- Lexi on 4/12/2019 5:53:08 PM with a score of 0
It was so good! Love the storyline and the attention to detail. I want more!
-- Emilien on 1/2/2018 12:56:19 AM with a score of 0
Amazing story! I call tell the author put a lot of thought into this. But seriously, the 'to be continued' almost killed me. If you're going to write a good story, at least finish it.
--
Troppy
on 6/17/2017 4:47:52 PM with a score of 0
What!? To be continued?! Nooooooo!!!!
-- Hannah on 5/25/2017 9:50:43 PM with a score of 0
I rated it lower due to the ending. The introduction of a new character was clumsy. It didn't roll like the rest of the story did. If you decide to fix the ending, please let me know.
--
Quorrah
on 3/5/2017 3:41:20 PM with a score of 0
Please release part 2 please. I really like the story.
-- Shin Lee on 7/27/2016 12:47:18 PM with a score of 0
So-so. Not too impressive, not too shabby.
-- Deadly Lion on 5/15/2016 1:29:21 PM with a score of 0
Good spelling and grammar. Excellent plot, very good story.
--
WizzyCat
on 4/8/2015 9:27:52 AM with a score of 0
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