Nami & Lili's Firefly Adventure

Player Rating3.70/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 28 ratings since 08/13/2020
played 172 times (finished 31)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

Grade 6 Labor Day Brainstorm Group's collaborative story - Class 6-1's Yuki and Class 6-4's Tony, Wendy, and Sam.

Player Comments

It was a very good story and the characters had a realistic feel to them, unlike most stories where the characters say things that they wouldn't say in real life. This story is definitely very cute and very engaging in nature. I'm looking forward to more works. :D The only flaw was that the ending felt a bit rushed, and since the ending is usually the fuel for the fire, I was a bit unsatisfied. Other than that, It was very good. :)
-- FemaleWolverine on 12/11/2020 2:10:09 AM with a score of 0
SPOILERS: Don't go into the forest on the first choice. The story abruptly ends with you losing your fireflies and getting lost after randomly tripping. /SPOILERS

I guess for a group of kids it's okay. The alien thing was amusing. The ginormous head and eyes of the image arrested my gaze.

There is the expected randomness of having a classroom full of authors. I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors, which is doubly impressive since so many adults on this forum write like English is their fifth language.

You won't find a sprawling epic here, but you may find a chuckle or too. It's definitely wholesome enough for the kids, and the images have an interesting style. Quick and light, and an interesting look into how the collective hive mind of children work. Interestingly, it kind of read like something written by an artificial intelligence. The Child Hive Mind at work. You may want to read it to prepare yourself just in case they take over the world.
-- Fluxion on 10/31/2020 7:33:43 PM with a score of 0
What a fantastic story!!!
-- Jack Z C4G6 on 10/16/2020 8:54:37 AM with a score of 0
Very good teacher
-- Wendy on 10/16/2020 8:51:53 AM with a score of 0
I was bracing myself for the worst, but these must be some smart 6th graders, and such a cute story.
-- AmritaB on 8/16/2020 12:06:23 PM with a score of 0
It's a pretty cute story, short and written well with few errors. Good job guys.
-- TheChef on 8/15/2020 6:13:11 PM with a score of 0
I’ll give this a 4 because it was impressive for being written by 6th graders, but it wasn’t really that good. If you click on the link (on page 1) that the game basically wants you to click on, you lose. “Page 2” is not a page title. I would have preferred this if it was a bit longer, too.
-- 325boy on 8/13/2020 9:47:46 PM with a score of 0
Hey, this was a pretty good storygame considering the authors are in the sixth grade. The only suggestion I'll really offer is that I would recommend having a stronger resolution for your endings. One example is the ending where the character is in the dark in the forest gets lost. It ends with "She is lost." or some very brief line like that. It's kind of like taking a deep breath and then forgetting to exhale. What is the result? Adding something along the lines of being afraid that she will never be found would make it seem less transactional.

Overall, I think your group did a good job.
-- OriginalClamurai on 8/13/2020 8:59:33 PM with a score of 0
This is pretty good for a group of sixth graders. The people in Classes 2 and 3 are going to be *so* jealous. I suspect you all have made some powerful rivals today.
-- Gower on 8/13/2020 10:45:22 AM with a score of 0
Awesome story we made! I love it! Except that we might have chosen a, perhaps, more interesting topic, that most of people in Class 1 and 4 will come read. But still, for a first experience and project, I Love it.
-- SAM (ONE OF THE AUTHORS) on 5/21/2020 8:57:12 AM with a score of 0
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