Player Comments on Resident Evil

The grammAR in this game is so apparent that it was hard to read through almost any of it.

Not that it took all that long given the linear pathing and no plot. I've played the last three resident evil games pretty recently and I still so almost no connection anywhere except for just ZOMBIES given the complete lack of plot.

The endings were so random and bare that it brought nothing except more endgame links to get through it faster.

horrible

Oh, no.
This is quite possibly one of the most atrocious things I've ever read. Everything is wrong with this, so let's break down, piece by piece.
PLOT- There was none. I know about the resident evil games, but there was little to no detail about much of anything here. I couldn't find character motivation or any resemblance to the RE games at all.
GRAMMAR- You lacked spaces, capitalization, paragraphs, and basically everything else. I found it hard to understand even the pages with two sentences on them. Speaking of which, don't have pages with two sentences on them.
ENDINGS-Random death endings. This story was linear, so linear that there is literally only one path. This barely counts as a CYOA story.
Whatever the original idea was is completely indiscernible from the terrible writing. Whatever hope I had for a good RE fanfic was lost under a mountain of garbage. I had hope, and lost it quickly. If you care about the story, I would start fresh next time.

U should really work on your game seriously

you really should make another one

i like this, its really good

You need some more detail in this. The deaths seem too subtle.

This story was... at best, boring.

Alright, i'll give you the negatives first.

The first thing that you need to know is to use the capital key on the first letter for names. There was an instance in the game where you didn't use the shift key for a name. I believe it was the name Daniel.

Second, I don't know much about Resident Evil but... this game takes the entire story and names from the resident evil series. I'll give you a tip when making some fan-fiction. Try to add your own unique content in the story. It would be boring if you copy everything that happened in the story itself. Add your own taste!

Third, put more description! Adjectives are the foundation of a story. Which of these sentences sound better to you? Oh no! There's a zombie trying to eat you or Oh poop. There's a bloody zombie slowly crawling towards you! The second sentences has adjectives and adverbs. That makes a reader picture an image in their heads!

Fourth, put more details in your story. Use the 6 W's! If you don't know what they are, it's Who, When, Why, Where, What, and How. These questions can really help out in your story making it more interesting. Mix this with the third one and you create stunning imagery.

Fifth, so linear and short. The longest path in this story is about 10 pages long and the others are about 4 pages long. The deaths don't make sense or are so surreal. I understand that Resident Evil is a horror story but really? Please try to put more pages next time.

Lastly, the first page is too short. Seriously, the first page is the page that attracts attention on your story. Please do the 4th and 3rd tips to make me get hooked to the story. It's the attention grabber or your story, you know?

Now, here are the positives.

The use of images make this story makes this story a tiny bit more interesting. I just had to pull away because of the lack of detail and I wasn't hooked.

You seem to be a determined writer if you put effort into your stories. Sadly, it appears that you only made 1 story on this site and shown no effort into ever improving. Maybe that's because you just made a game in a hurry and then stopped logging on.

I liked it. Scary and fanny at the same moment. Please continue this story.

Ever heard of spacing?
Overall, very bad story, needs a mega-improvement

Can't win

Serious review time. The game itself was short. You did not fully express the plot of Resident evil itself. It felt like a random zombie game. Even if the setting took place in Raccoon City, you made Resident Evil look like a book drawn by a 13 year old kid who does not even know what an independent clause is.

3/8

Plz make another

Its ok
sincerly, 24freddy

the game was god but you could use a bit more knowledge of the RE universe. maybe the next game can have lurkers and umbrella. you crash land in the alps and have to fight your way to an army outpost. umbrella shows their true colors and sicks nemesis on you and the rest of the game is spent trying to find jill valentine and chris and get the hell out of raccoon city.

I liked it but it seems like whenever you try to help someone, you end up dying too. My ending for instance, I had a team of 7 and I ended up being the only survivor.

Fairly short and kinda boring.

I think there should be a sequel of course I want to know what happened.

it was fun and very creative. not to short, not too long. great!

It was fine. Certainly not the best but not the worst either.

Much too short, but I find myself wondering what's going to happen to me (the character, not actually me lol)... please make a sequel!!

And the moral of the story is... When bad stuff starts happening, save your own ass and leave everyone else to die! Mwahahaha! :p

Seth says MEH!

good

A bit too linear, requires reader to be familiar with the resident evil series. You should give just a bit of background for unfamiliar readers. Nice start, could use a whole lot more character development, and this game fell victim to the if not a, then b format.Keep at it, I'd like a sequel that could hopefully incorporate some of these elements.

I've not seen any different plot in zombies categorie. What we all are doing?

pz keep this story going i realy like reading it

It's okay! Something you should know, though, there should be spaces after exclamation marks!

ehhhhh.... its cool 4/8

pretty decent story length. Though not the best story

Too many dead ends, should be more open.

AWSOME!!!

that was awsome you should mahe the sequel

no i never saw the movie or show, or whatever it is! i'm a nice person, i didn't know they wanted to eat me!

Really enjoyed it. Big fan of resident evil movies a games and it was fun. WOuldnt mind anohter.

Short, also there is a missing link inside, but overall it's still quite good.

Can't wait to do the sequel!

you should definatley make another one

too short.

It was fun to play, but there were some spelling mistakes and a few of the deaths didn't make sense.

Linear...

Great idea, but this story suffers from chronic Final Fantasy X syndrome. (That's my new way of saying that it is VERY linear.)

Scary zombies.... =)

The writing could be a bit better, but it is relatively exciting. Try adding more depth and descriptions. Decent job. My recommendation would be to revise this before making a sequel.

This Was Alright.
Please Make A Sequel.

not original enough. add your own flavor to it next time.

GOOD, FUN!

It's ok, a good story but I felt bad when "winning" was getting sick anyway. Or did I play it wrong?

i guess i was expecting something else

I liked it good job, despite the linearity.

that was the best game online that i played that was good you rock dude!

this game had potential but got sloppy in the end. needs more pictures if possible, and it's not finished. finish it and you got a winner.

MAKE A SEQUAL PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Make a sequel! Make a sequel!

DUDE! That Game was Awesome! You should definatly make a sequel...or seven! Check out my game shinobi wars in the fantasy section.

it sucked

awsome! that felt like a real resident evil game and was reasonbly long and challeging, YES! for god's sake make a freaking sequel.

I didn't like the ending. This game doesn't seem to need a sequel but it does need a better ending. What happens? If you think a sequel is required to tell the story then by all means do so. I just hate cliffhangers like this one.

Very Wierd and also very freaky. I give it about an B. But for just being so freaky I this game is awesome.

Okay, I played it again. You need pictures, but it is still a good game. Don't mind Mr. Zombie. He's just a moron.

Pretty cool. Make a sequel using objects, if you can.

Whoa....awesome. It sort of scared me. Especially the ending link. I liked the adventure.

Some pictures would have helped this gam suck less. People want to see my beatiful face. They want to see the oozing and the puss. They don't want blah, blah, blah, blah, with no pictures. If I know this and I'm a brainless zombie what does that say about you