Love & Dating
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"run through the jungle"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
A simple story of two girls and the changing seasons.
Well my Dad sure will be surprised when I tell him his only son has become a lesbian :) On a serious note this is a beautifully written story in the style of Snow and Farewell my Childhood Self. A good mix of choices and development there but I would have liked to see the relationship and experiences explored in more detail, getting into a relationship as a teenager is a scary enough experience but getting into a gay relationship as a teenager in a judgemental society, I imagine that's pretty emotionally challenging. 7/8
on 3/8/2015 10:48:11 PM with a score of 0
A beautiful story and a great writing style to fit it. A few spelling errors throughout, but they're not very noticeable and don't take away from the story. A good, light read with a darker theme. It would have been nice for the relationship to be explored a little more, but other than that I absolutely loved it. I'm beginning to realize my review is very similar to Will11's, but it's coincidence I promise, haha. 7/8
on 11/30/2019 1:06:49 AM with a score of 0
Hey, I got the good ending!
on 11/3/2018 12:33:43 AM with a score of 0
wh why that was good i cried
-- tay on 10/16/2017 2:32:18 PM with a score of 0
(No no no my favorite season IS spring I can't believe I was forced to choose summer! Fall and winter, I can't even contemplate :(. )
Anyway, this story has quite a lot of potential. You did a good job of evoking emotion, although it would have been nice to see more background stories for the main characters. For the memories part, for instance, you could have described a specific situation that helps develop the character of Hana even more. Remember, details make things a lot more interesting.
My one main problem with the story is its linearity. Given that this is in the romance category, this was somewhat forgivable, especially since it was decently written. However, **spoiler, sorry** it would be nice to have a perspective where you can choose not to fall in love with Hana, or even a way to prevent Hana from dying (I don't think I found an ending where she doesn't jump?)
Overall, good job. It is a bit reminiscent of the classic Snow, but with a different twist, and certainly one of the better ones that I've seen. 5/8.
on 6/19/2017 1:48:57 AM with a score of 0
I thought it was cool, but I'm confused. I thought the character I was playing was a girl????
on 6/7/2017 3:56:50 PM with a score of 0
-- c on 12/23/2016 6:09:10 AM with a score of 0
I don't know why people are giving this such low scores. This is almost as good as Sethaniel's Snow, although it's shorter and more linear.
on 6/8/2016 7:39:16 PM with a score of 0
Rated 8/8. This is deep, man. I like it.
on 4/7/2016 5:05:49 PM with a score of 0
wheres he endiung where she dosent die thanks
on 3/22/2016 2:18:54 PM with a score of 0
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