, #71 for
played 553 times (finished 106)
"walk in the park"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
Why read this? Go play! :D
I started to read this to review it, but then I read the instructions and went outside to play. Then I realized that when you said, “Go play,” you were talking about this very story game and weren’t trying to get me to go outside and exercise. For that I am thankful.
There is an interesting start to this story. I guess I’m a wolf or a dog, since I’m in a pack, so there’s that. But I do like that it starts right out with action and gets to going. I’m not sure what I think of all the early game end story options. I’m glad that they are clearly labeled as end of story options, so I know what happens if I pick that, but I think perhaps you could just leave those out. I mean, why have an end option – if that’s the case, the reader wouldn’t have read the story in the first place, right? But it is nice that they are clear.
The story was quite short, obviously, but it was neat. I really liked the concept of trying to explore and figure out the incredibly difficult mystery. Well, okay, it wasn’t really that hard. It is a little interesting to see that no matter what choice you pick, you get the same result, yet if you pick the correct option, the story does let you know that you’ve made the right choice.
I think this story has tremendous potential. Other authors can read this one to see how things can be setup and could easily expand on this idea and this type of storyline with additional options, additional endings, and could even put a few additional conditionals on the choices to limit who you can accuse based on who you have investigated. This was a neat start to a story, thank you for sharing it with the site.
on 6/22/2018 6:38:48 PM
Heh. I found it humorous, but short. Like one of those books people enjoy, but they have only 100 pages in them and then they're like, "What? That's it?!"
The fact that it's a mystery aspect story made it very interesting, especially with the whole wolf/dog perspective thing. I found it very creative and impressive you were able to put those together and have a quality storygame come out of it.
Sadly, it did have some downsides, such as being very easy since the choices didn't seem to effect the story much, only the end choices did for me (unless I refused to help with the case). Branching is key for storygames, remember!
I can't tell you how much I thought this was warrior cats at first. The first few words were about joining the pack, and I was literally about to die thanks to it. I'm very glad that wasn't the case. xD
There were also spelling mistakes, although I spotted little to no accidental ones, but there were ones that I imagine were on purpose (such as "stahp"), but a spelling error is a spelling error to me.
Overall, the storygame, despite being incredibly short was fun to me in a way, but more character development would have been nice, especially for a mystery storygame like this one.
I'm gonna say 4/8, pretty good.
on 3/19/2017 12:54:35 AM
needs more content.
on 4/28/2018 6:54:40 PM
I really have no idea what was happening or what was going on.
-- Jreesebot on 4/27/2018 2:32:10 PM
It was a good but small... uh, I'm not sure what that was exactly. I didn't get bored reading it, mostly cause it was so short, and it was pretty nifty, but it could've been better.
You should explain what animal you are, you know, give it a little more insight. How did the box get there? What did it look like? You could've done it as easily if it had of been humans instead. If you wanted a story game with animals, put them in one where it needs to be animals. I also think you could've lengthened it to make it better.
on 4/26/2018 11:50:39 PM
Was fun, I tried a few times to poke around and see other options. Very limited outcomes.
on 4/25/2018 1:08:00 PM
Okay, this was cute, but I had the vague feeling the whole time that I was dealing with characters I SHOULD know something about, but actually know nothing about, other than their eye color. I mean, it's pretty harmless and somewhat adorable, but ultimately it lacks enough substance to know what you were trying to accomplish.
on 12/23/2017 11:44:33 PM
short but funny great for laughs although you should define whats happening like what happened or if your wolves or greyhounds(lol)
on 9/25/2016 12:22:20 AM
Rpndomly acuced the first person I talked to because he smelled like cardboard, still don't know what I accused him of but I was right!
on 12/9/2015 12:39:24 PM
Well a fun little story but a bit strange. I was trying to find out "who did it" while wondering the whole time "who did what". Cute story though :)
on 3/8/2015 11:26:26 PM
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