The Free Hand
Mystery / Puzzle
, #2 for
played 17,622 times (finished 473)
"march in the swamp"
"A well spent lunch break"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.
The Free Hand
A work of Fiction by Ashen_Snake.
Great story with nicely-detailed imagery which sets the scene and is improved even further with the choice of images included in the story.
One thing I think you could improve on though, is building up your characters - especially the main character. Perhaps you could have added a notebook in which the reader could have read the thoughts of a particular character?
However overall, very nicely-done story which has enough of a challenge to keep the reader thinking, but not too difficult so as to be impossible to complete. Good job Ashen-Snake :)
on 8/26/2014 12:50:25 AM with a score of 0
Eerie. Quite well-written, and requires thought but doesn't feel frustrating in trying to beat. I managed to get (all?) three endings after a few tries. Nice work.
on 1/5/2010 8:50:35 PM with a score of 0
If you're thirteen years old, then you are the most precocious writer I've ever seen. Regardless, not only is this one of the best written stories on the site, it is one of the best stories, and combines the intense descriptions disturbing photos. Excellent everything! This is going in my list.
on 9/12/2006 8:56:04 PM with a score of 0
It's a really fun, interesting game! Except that I am really confused at the ending. Can someone explain it? Please? I didn't understand at all and now I'm getting irritated trying to figure it out.
-- Mandi on 1/9/2017 9:15:25 PM with a score of 0
Excellent! This had the right amount of creepiness that kept me on the edge of my seat, while providing fun gameplay to boot. I immensely enjoyed this :)
on 11/20/2016 10:21:30 PM with a score of 0
on 11/19/2016 4:55:06 PM with a score of 0
Got all three endings. Was very well written had a creepy atmosphere that made all the weird things happening seem normal for the place.
on 9/1/2016 11:28:26 AM with a score of 0
This guy is a professional author
Didnt actually understand the story though
-- Hehe on 2/10/2016 12:54:07 AM with a score of 0
It's Finger lickin good
-- Collin on 1/22/2016 1:10:42 AM with a score of 0
An excellent combination of puzzle, mystery, and horror.
on 1/11/2016 6:19:02 PM with a score of 0
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