Player Comments on the late republic part one

This is a remarkable story game. I haven't seen Star Wars for several years but even I'm fairly sure Sith Lords don't get chewed out by "Sarge", have pals called Johnny who cry if they aren't allowed to join the Sith and regularly use guns and rocks in battle. This game has also introduced me to the word "diddin't" which is a masterpiece of misspelt but phonetically correct language. I don't mean to be harsh but I'm not sure writing is your forte, also I'm not sure if you've ever seen Star Wars.

Wow, umm.. the grammar was not very good. Then again, that in itself is the least glaringly offensive thing in this story, surprisingly.

terrible 1/8

..what is this....

What the hell is this bullcrap. Poorly done with no proper use of grammar.

Toooo short

This mess is barely readable. A lot of people on the site make the mistake of writing their dialogue like a script. You actually alternate between proper dialogue and a script-like format.

waiting for part two to come out

So I purposely killed myself as you completely lost me in the first page after I made my faction choice.

Johnny?....>WTF... Star Wars dude, how about you make up names, instead of useing real world names. Also, the Sith (or how about just enemy Troopers) can't be sith unless they use the darkside. The Sith are not a country or anything like that, they are a school of thought, like the Jedi, in fact the if there are no more Sith anymore as your intro suggests, the majority of there non force useing soldiers would have left...Non force using sith soldiers for the most part were brian washed by the dark side and there sith masters.

If your going to do SW fiction, do a little research first.

Too linear and full of punctuation errors. Needs editing

really great story. can't wait til the next one

It was awesome. Star wars is so boss. (from a nerds point of view) It was meh

I couldn't even finish it. It had pretty bad spelling and at certain points in the story it was to easy to die, for example choosing which wire to cut. The only thing I liked about it was that it was longer than most games I've played.

2/8

I'm against useless comments so, nice try but, needs work, and lots of it. More effort, more paths, longer pages, more logical results to actions.

Meh

Annoyingly linear and poorly written. Your title is lacking capitalization for heaven's sake. Also, it's really frustrating when an author tells you not to write negative (spelled with an "a") comments about their story. If you don't want negative comments, don't publish your work.

Grammatical errors, Spelling errors, extremely linear, and the only choices were obvious. You really need to learn how to write, 1/8

Spelling Errors, Grammar Errors, and transitions from page to page were sketchy. Other than that, good story, can't wait for part two, whith no speeling and grammar errors.

The storyline wasn't bad. The spelling and grammar were just bad. I'd consider reviewing this and take care of the mistakes.

3/8 I like it and if you redo it I'd be glad to rate it a 7 if there were no mistakes. Keep it up with the good storylines.

Ok really? Don't use my name please...

More to the actual story. I enjoyed it but it did seem a little short. Keep up the good work!

While not trying to be rude i will state some things you might want to fix. (based on my opinions and how i'm going to write my own story's.)
1. the story is a little to short for me
2. don't do 1-5 sentance page's, It get's a little annoying.
3. Try to a little more background maybe? (optional?)

4. This opinion is not a opinion but a statment of an opinion. :)
I did enjoy reading the story though.