The Order of the Midnight Sun

Player Rating7.35/8

"#3 overall, #1 for 2009"
based on 2703 ratings since 08/03/2009
played 87,456 times (finished 2,829)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Blue versus red in a classic battle of good versus evil and right versus wrong.

This is more story than game and a lot more story than anything I've written previously.

There is one true ending (marked by a stirring legend), one other really good ending and there are at least two other legitimate endings. All legitimate endings include epilogues.

Player Comments

I certainly did enjoy this story, but this was only because of the idea created by the author. The writing irked me and I have several complaints about it, but I can see why it is a very highly regarded storygame. The one thing that I do not understand is why it is ranked so highly in comparison to other stories by esteemed authors like EndMaster, Berka, and Will.



The writing is very choppy and incomplete, but can easily be fixed by combining some of the sentences to make more complex and structured writing, because that is what is needed with an idea like this.



Each event was nicely placed and wasn't introduced too quickly or too slowly. The attention to detail was nice as well, but a few situations could be changed for a more smooth and fulfilling transition, along with some being slowed down for a better understanding of what's going on.



The writing was nicely detailed, with enough description to give the reader a nice idea of each scene. Some parts though, needed a bit more detail as to not leave the reader confused about what he/she just read.



Some of the conflicts the character faces are a bit extreme, and the solutions even more. I think a different idea could have been inserted for more practicality and have a more clear storyline.



In some situations, I could think of many different choices I could have made rather than being forced to do a certain action. I think a larger variety of choices would make for a better story and a much larger and less linear plot line, but the story wasn't very linear, so congrats to you.



I caught quite a few mistakes in grammar and spelling, which can be solved with some time and effort spent in proofreading, and someone else's help would speed up the process and leave less chance for missing some of the mistakes.

5/8
-- Nyctophilia on 2/22/2017 11:23:45 AM with a score of 0
This game was awesome! I can't imagine how long you spent making it but I am extremely impressed. There were a few flaws like the maze being kind of buggy. There were some places where you could go forward but not back. Got to say, I don't think I've ever seen so many cliches piled into a story before. The young boy who's left orphaned because his parents were killed and his village destroyed. Then there's the generic female character who never really does anything useful and is just there to be the main character's love interest. And of course your character's the stereotypical "chosen one" who's destined to save the world from the day he's born. That said, I kind of liked the cliches in this story. They were well written so that you actually believed them and cared about what the character was going through. Also certain things about the way the story was written give me the impression that it was written by quite a young person, but not in a bad way. More in a way that you just know the writer's going to get better and better as he gets older. Great game, great story, lots and lots of praise. ^_^
-- Briar_Rose on 12/28/2012 5:10:47 PM with a score of 5859
This was so worth doing. This is definitely one of my favorite storygames on the site thus far. My only complaint was the maze; I lost points there because I ended up skipping. To me it would have helped a lot if there were maybe landmarks to help. I did try mapping the cave, obviously I messed up on that. If you do another maze it would be awesome if you include descriptions of little things that might help. "North. You pass a pool of stagnant water" or just something like that. Just a suggestion. I know you said you regretted it on the disclaimer but I don't think a maze is a bad idea (I played Golden Oldies: Adventure & I appreciate a good maze), it can just be upgraded from a simple series of turns. Other than that I loved it. I played from a near end point to get different endings & they were all good.
-- windupgirl on 8/18/2011 9:38:37 AM with a score of 5015
The storytelling was a little choppy but it still had a great story; I would definitely recommend this to anyone who likes adventure stories.
-- MrFluffkins19118 on 5/13/2017 8:48:46 AM with a score of 6096
Beautiful.
-- rninant12 on 5/4/2017 8:41:31 AM with a score of 5690
SO SO SO GOOD
-- potlurin on 4/30/2017 1:15:51 PM with a score of 5280
Found the character shallow, but was sad she died
-- Artemis on 4/23/2017 9:06:33 PM with a score of 5121
i gave this a low rate not because of the story it was good i gave it a low rate because according to the website this is choose your own adventure you could not choose you had to pick the authors choice and follow a single story line with no chance of changing and getting any kind of good ending speaking of endings the "true ending" was not all that good just a restart of the story that happened seeming to suggest your choices and strife was for nothing
-- Caseydeni on 4/12/2017 4:27:44 AM with a score of 5309
I got the brokenhearted ending at i was actually sad. You have done a great job of making the characters seem human and that means you can get attached to them.
-- heimerdinger on 4/10/2017 5:18:44 AM with a score of 6
Great story. Really well developed characters and a thoroughly fleshed out mythology. MAZE HINT: draw similar sized lines each step you take, mark the number (top of page) and mark the directions OTHER than backwards you can go.
-- Battlemage on 4/9/2017 3:43:55 PM with a score of 0
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