To Make a Sandwich
, #20 for
played 2,401 times (finished 339)
"trek through the forest"
"A nice jog down the driveway"
"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.
You are hungry, and need to get to the kitchen for a sandwich.
This was pretty random, but the writing was coherent enough to make the randomness quite entertaining. I didn't expect that I would possibly be able to go on a fun filled adventure with a Capybara when I clicked on the title, so points for originality!
Some of the scenes generally made me laugh, but I couldn't help but feel that the story itself could've been fleshed out a bit more. Only a few paths truly leads towards an adventure, while the others are rather short and to the point.
Also, there is some instances when picking a certain choice will loop you back into the beginning, but that's only really a minor issue. One that was made up by the number of choices that lead to me meeting a ninja, or even fighting zombies.
This story retains the quality of it's writing throughout, as grammatical problems were never something that I found myself running into as I read through each path. So in a technical sense when it comes to the presentation of things, this story does well.
Overall, this is a fun game to kill five minutes with. The humor and general randomness might not be for everyone, but this was written well.
on 1/15/2017 3:14:55 PM
That was silly. Why would you be so silly here? No, really, that story was a nice story, it was quite a short story, and it was a bit random, but it was still fun. It can be difficult to pull off a story that is entertaining and random because usually random is…too random? Authors who want to make a random story should read this one and learn a bit about how to make a random story interesting. This story also had good grammar and descriptions and had a quality number of choices, especially for such a short story. And in this story, some of the different paths crossed one another, which also makes it interesting. Because of the number of different paths, readers should indeed play more than once to try out the different directions and see the effects of your choices. This was a lot of fun, thank you for sharing this one with the site!
on 8/6/2018 12:58:09 PM
Very interesting lol
-- Mhou on 6/25/2018 11:55:22 AM
Hm...weird, but I like weirdness.
on 6/23/2017 11:26:54 PM
This story was absolutely hilarious. But why in one scene is the capybara fake, but in all the others, it's real? You might want to consider lengthening it, although if it was too much longer, it wouldn't be as funny.
on 11/14/2016 6:09:06 PM
Fun and random. Good for a rainy day- of any kind of day, really. : )
-- YUB-yub on 5/28/2016 2:41:55 PM
Hilarious game. Love it. Replay so many times.
on 4/24/2016 4:50:31 PM
This just made me laugh a bunch. It was a funny story.
on 2/29/2016 4:03:26 PM
on 1/18/2016 6:37:54 PM
I went an a amazing adventure with my new best buddy and forgot he game me rabies then I ate a sandwich and died. I never even got to cofess my love to him.
10 out of 10 would capybara again
-- Death by sandwich on 10/10/2015 11:54:59 PM
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