Player Rating3.73/8

"#526 overall, #44 for 2014"
based on 110 ratings since 04/15/2014
played 1,314 times (finished 129)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

In this game, you play as a boy in high school that is simply living his life. This is a story of how things will surprise you.

Player Comments

There are some good ideas here, buried in a sea of poor pacing and incomprehensible characterization.
The protagonist's complete lack of reaction to Hayley's revelation leaves me confused as to whether he knew that information about himself all along and simply forgot about it, or if he's just a cardboard zombie with no emotions. I don't feel anything about the ending, because I don't really know anything about the characters as people.
This could be a decent story if it had more description, more scene-setting, and more clearly defined characters.
-- Sethaniel on 4/16/2014 10:26:19 AM with a score of 0
This is pretty short for a fantasy adventure. The main characters aren't developed enough, the integration of fantasy is rushed and confusing, and the plot twist in the end didn't even make me feel bad for any of them. The story needs more plot. One thing that I did like was the visuals. The pictures of the school represented the setting very well. The ending pictures were a little disappointing.
-- AppDude27 on 4/16/2014 12:51:05 AM with a score of 0
Yeah, I mean the twist was kind of out of left field, but it was short and sweet
-- SpaghettiMan on 10/2/2019 11:26:04 AM with a score of 0
...That was weird, but I'll give it a 6 anyway
-- Charcoal37 on 8/12/2018 4:03:38 PM with a score of 0
The execution of this piece is YA in nature, which caters towards the audience it is targeting. The concept of the Sanctified and the Unforgiven proves to be at least noteworthy, albeit a bit shonen-anime to me - superpowers that can be absorbed seems to lend itself to a few godlike figures that could tear through a population.
With that being said, the entire story was FISTED down the throat of the reader, with the Haylie literally telling the narrator the bounds of the world within two pages (if that). Furthermore, this story felt tremendously linear, only allowing for a few branching options right towards the end. If this were to become a series, then perhaps this could be capitalized upon, but as of now, the story is unsuccessful.
-- Marcus on 8/6/2018 10:09:00 PM with a score of 0
Yikes. Poor quality overall. The plot didn't make sense - things are revealed too quickly, so the story progresses in a sort of "jolting" fashion. Explanations are just dropped in without time for the MC to understand. Because of the extremely fast pacing, I didn't connect with any of the characters, which made this difficult to enjoy.
-- rotarybird on 7/26/2018 10:07:25 PM with a score of 0
Nice story, but its confusing
-- DoodleCup on 7/21/2018 10:10:52 AM with a score of 0
The story was very linear, but then again, linear is my style, so I can't judge too much on that. However, it's a small story, and I felt as though it had great potential. However, it seemed as though none of the choices mattered, even the ones at the end. I mean, Sanctified and Unforgiven? Those would make a great battle. But you instead made it to where two choices later, it's the end. If you could have added more pages and a bigger plot, then I would think it would be better.
-- EatTheCake on 7/15/2018 2:41:02 AM with a score of 0
Oh my gosh everything happened so quickly. Even a little bit of development would be better than plunging in like that once Dylan finds out the ~thing~. It's a creative idea and could be a really cool story with some work.
-- kcding on 7/3/2018 1:44:27 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good...
-- Screen Name Loading... on 11/6/2016 1:14:25 PM with a score of 0
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