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"wandering through the desert"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
This game should be taken seriously, this is my first game please make sure to tell me any faults
Still rather incoherent. I have no idea who I am, or how I ended up in wherever the hell that compound was or why there's zombies or anything, really. It is much improved, but it needs some work. Your spelling and grammar isn't terrible but it's obvious that as you get excited, it slips a bit. Proofreading each page is what I'd advocate as a solution. Spend more time on Character Development because it was sorely lacking. I really didn't like the one page where it was either fake a heart attack or die. Terrible choice set there. Overall though, much better than before. Still wouldn't be half-decent if it wasn't your first game but pretty decent for a first attempt.
on 6/12/2010 1:52:57 PM with a score of 0
To improve this game, I think you should add more vivid description, perhaps increase the length, make the characters more interesting and worth reading about, as well as offer more choices.
on 1/30/2020 10:10:16 PM with a score of 0
-- Jordi P on 12/23/2019 12:41:48 PM with a score of 0
Uh... so what happens next after I go through the exit? This game is so short...
on 8/30/2017 3:55:56 AM with a score of 0
Good idea but the plot was poorly developed and I needed more.
on 1/25/2017 11:58:09 AM with a score of 0
on 11/15/2016 7:00:26 PM with a score of 0
really? one ending, death
on 10/11/2016 12:57:13 PM with a score of 0
Invading the soviet union would really present a ton of logistical issues. This needs a good backstory. Nice try.
on 6/30/2016 6:40:48 PM with a score of 0
-- Ethan Marshall on 5/26/2016 4:35:20 PM with a score of 0
on 3/31/2016 1:45:35 PM with a score of 0
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