"I'm going out."

Player Rating3.12/8

"#838 overall, #107 for 2015"
based on 320 ratings since 05/22/2015
played 3,323 times (finished 410)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

You decide to go for a walk on a quiet night to get some fresh air. What happens from there is up to you. Rated 4 for some implied animal cruelty. (DON'T BE MEAN TO ANIMALS, KIDS)

Player Comments

This is a nice setup for a story and a good first page. It helps set the tone for the story and helps the reader get into the story, at least a little bit. From there, it kind of goes downhill. The pages beyond the first page all feel very short. There are very few details on each page. There are few descriptions. The author could add a lot more details for each location: look to engage all five senses when you’re writing a story. Look for ways to describe everything the main character sees, feels, and hears. If you, as the author, can put yourself in the story, then you can help put the reader in the story – and that’s why many people read stories, to experience something else in another place.

The story itself is also quite short. I can appreciate the different options, paths, and different endings. I did have fun exploring and finding lots of different endings, which is really good for a CYOA story. But each page leading to those endings was quite short. This could be a lot more of a story with a bit more effort and just more description on each page. The story could likely be expanded by 10x the word count simply by writing more on each of the pages that already exist.
-- Ogre11 on 8/11/2018 3:30:43 PM with a score of 0
While your story has some sort of purpose, there was no true plot. Where's the conflict? And what's up with that ending? I had thought that maybe you were just getting into the exposition, but ended right where I though everything would start!!

The story lacks details and action and has little background (the part with the protagonist's mother and the chicken was good). You need more of it!

I'm very interested in the Alex character. Half of the choices are the result of his demand for groceries.

Anyway, I did like the events. Your writing piqued my interest despite the lack of meat.
-- Crescentstar on 12/8/2016 11:04:27 PM with a score of 0
It shouldn’t end so quickly, but it’s not bad
-- writeyourstory on 10/7/2020 1:44:00 PM with a score of 0
i commented happy
-- aka on 3/9/2020 1:45:15 PM with a score of 0
It was quite short, the paths could have been fleshed out a lot more, and there was no clear plot. However, it was sound grammatically, and the different paths and endings were interesting to find.
-- Luciel707 on 10/8/2019 6:48:13 PM with a score of 0
It's a little short, but still ok.
-- Strawberries13 on 10/3/2019 6:50:05 PM with a score of 0
I liked it, was short tho
-- sylvieallain19 on 9/18/2019 4:23:27 PM with a score of 0
Very interesting. I like it. It deserves 7/8
-- zaydam1000000 on 9/16/2019 11:32:15 PM with a score of 0
I went to go get groceries but Alex got mad at me!!!
-- AMuggleNerd on 7/7/2019 2:19:00 PM with a score of 0
Now why does this story have a 3/8 average?

It was really good in my opinion. Good plot, good choices, interesting story overall. I really don’t get all the negativity.

-- 325boy on 6/20/2019 5:55:32 AM with a score of 0
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