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Why did the mailman die? Because everybody dies.

Someone changed the name of the thread. LOL, Sorry Mizal, didn't mean to annoy you! XD

It's going to be a high fantasy. I plan to add magic and mythical beast to it.

Thanks for the feedback!

Can I get your opinions and ideas for this story? Here's the story: There once was a young, seventeen year old, boy who lives in the rural part of his country. he lived with his younger sister and mother. His father was away fighting a war. This war was a fight between humans and monsters. Each one wanting a part of the other's territory. This war was causing families to lose their jobs and homes.Most of the money was taken away, by the government, to fund the war. The boy's family was not exception. In fact they barely had any money to live off of at all. The boy worked day and night to provide for his family for the boy's sister was often sick and bedridden. She had a rare condition that disabled her ability to walk properly. The cost of her medicine took what little money the boy's family had. His mother had to stay at home to take care of the younger sister. You see, women were not allowed to do men's work. Their job was to stay at home and raise the children. As a result, the boy had to grow up quickly so that his family could survive. One day, the soldiers of the country came to the boy's town. Curious, the boy made his way to the front of the crowd that had gathered around the soldiers. The soldiers started to call out most of the names of boys who lived in the town, the boy's name among them. The soldier's asked for the boys that were called, for they had been chosen to join the war. The boy was terrified. He was not only going to war but he had to leave his family behind. Who will take care of them when he is gone? Alas, the boy could not escape his fate and was taken to the capital to be trained. He could not escape his fate to join the war but maybe he can change his destiny.

Oh, I didn't know. Still new to this site. Sorry.

So I wrote a prologue to a story but I don't know if I should continue it. Can you give me your opinions and ideas on what I could do next? Here's the story: There once was a young, seventeen year old, boy who lives in the rural part of his country. he lived with his younger sister and mother. His father was away fighting a war. This war was a fight between humans and monsters. Each one wanting a part of the other's territory. This war was causing families to lose their jobs and homes. Most of the money was taken away, by the government, to fund the war. The boy's family was no exception. In fact, they barely had any money to live off of at all. The boy worked day and night to provide for his family for the boy's sister was often sick and bedridden. She had a rare condition that disabled her ability to walk properly. The cost of her medicine took what little money the boy's family had. His mother had to stay at home to take care of the younger sister. You see, women were not allowed to do men's work. Their job was to stay at home and raise the children. As a result, the boy had to grow up quickly so that his family could survive. One day, the soldiers of the country came to the boy's town. Curious, the boy made his way to the front of the crowd that had gathered around the soldiers. The soldiers started to call out most of the names of boys who lived in the town, the boy's name among them. The soldier's asked for the boys that were called, for they had been chosen to join the war. The boy was terrified. He was not only going to war but he had to leave his family behind. Who will take care of them when he is gone? Alas, the boy could not escape his fate and was taken to the capital to be trained. He could not escape his fate to join the war but maybe he can change his destiny.

Hello, as you can tell, I'm new here. I am excited about sharing my work online with everyone! When I publish my work I want honest opinions, the good and the bad. It's the only way I'm going to improve as a writer.