lisaves, The Reader

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I'm a girl, and I write games.


Missing in Action

A story about friendship and survival.

This is lisaves' first storygame.

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Missing in Action on 10/13/2010 12:12:10 PM

Hey, thanks for all the feedback. It's humbling to start from scratch learning a new way to construct stories after having published numerous times in literary journals, secured an agent, made something of a name for myself, etc. I really appreciate how much time you've spent on this feedback. It might take me a while, but I hope to try creating a storygame that is all new for next time. I wonder if someone with more experience at the game side would be interested in co-authoring? I'm good at characterization, description, and plot, but I'm new at the game aspects, and I'm not a programmer. I can think pretty logically, but it would be nice to learn variables and other advanced elements from someone with experience.

Missing in Action on 10/7/2010 12:17:31 PM

That's the first "lame" ending that possibly comes up.

Missing in Action on 10/7/2010 12:15:25 PM

Thanks, 3J. I appreciate that. Perhaps this is a good time to comment on my process. I took a linear story I'd written a long time ago and rewrote it to fit this medium, adding large chunks of new material in the process. I was also trying to play a bit with the conventions of CYOA, which is why I consciously chose to break a few rules--perhaps to bad effect. :) When I took the two events--singing in the cave to stay alive, and the pissing to stay alive--and split them into two different outcomes, it shortened the perceived length of time in the cave. I also wonder if with this genre readers will want more action on the part of the guys in the cave instead of being rescued by the mother--can you handle being rescued by the mother? :). At any rate, I think I lost something in the translation to CYOA from the original story and didn't make enough use of the links within this medium. Ah, well. I've never flowcharted anything like this before, so it was a fun and instructional process for me anyway!

As far as A), I wanted to play a bit with character motivation and consequences of previous choices, getting back to your relationship with Rick. I guess I'm a little disappointed that we "can't" build in a little reversal like this every once in a while.

B), yeah, I should have done more with that thread.

C), that was just a joke, and a way to split off a first bad ending. But I can see that it might have been too much of a taunt.

I hope I can break some rules here and there as I carve out my own way of approaching this genre. I read CYOA books in the 80s and loved them, but I come back to it from having read mainly literary fiction (as opposed to fantasy or other genre fiction) as an adult. Not saying that's better, just where I'm coming from.



Missing in Action on 10/6/2010 11:15:37 AM

Hey, 3J, first, thanks for taking the time to read and comment. Second, I need to know which ending you chose that seemed so disappointing to you (not the spider one, the other one). Also, the two threads aren't the same. While they share some of the same moments, here's a critical difference between them, in how the guys survive the cave. But your comment at least gives me a lesson in why not to use some of the same material in two very different plot threads.

Missing in Action on 10/5/2010 6:37:46 PM

Thanks, Jeff. I appreciate that. I know you're an honest, critical (in the sense of reading with a keen eye, not necessarily negative) reader.

Missing in Action on 10/5/2010 4:55:40 PM

Sorry about that, and thanks, 3J. Looking forward to hearing what you think.

Missing in Action on 10/5/2010 3:47:40 PM

Hey, I just published my first storygame, Missing in Action. I think I followed all the necessary steps, but please let me know if I got something wrong. All feedback welcome, and the more detailed, the better. Thanks!

View This Story on 9/22/2010 5:35:18 PM

And thanks, mr.xcentrix. It's nice to feel so welcome!

View This Story on 9/22/2010 5:33:57 PM

Thanks, 3J. Will try that. And yeah, this is happening with pop-up blocker turned off. I can get the page windows to pop up in AE, but I can't get any response when I click on View This Story.

View This Story on 9/22/2010 5:32:33 PM

Thanks, Jeff. I was just about to query as to whether or not Chrome is better. Hm.