I know is a pain in the ass and is broken in grammar, and too boring... But please, Could you read and give me some feedback? I worked really hard on it
I am sorry, fir having to ask for it, but could be great for me.
Thanks for the feedback. Cafeteria well, yes, all depends on the branch you get and you were in the branch that doesn't have people it. The cafeteria people are in fact romance options in some paths and spoilers on others.
The ashes on the storm is a version of The dust in the wind I think you said in English. Maybe I should change if it is not clear.
@Jacoder23 Can I ask you what did make you decide not to interfere in the discussion? The thing is that I was trying to people let that path to the last one, so I tried to make it sound like less epic than the other, maybe I have to rewrite in a way that sounds worse.
You have been really useful to me, thanks for the help.
War scientific aka hacker and strategist is same as soldier available in any of two totally separated branches even if the results of being a soldier or a hacker end up with a totally different experience. My problem is one of branches is made to understand and give context to the principal. But few people who had tried the game starts with the part they should not and that is causing the idea that there are no npcs, not romances not action and that end is quite linear... the branching and all action is int the others by design.