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Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago

I am thinking about creating a dating sim style storygame on this site. Something like those games from japan. It will totally be PG-13. The object of the game is to socialize with girls in high school. It would be cool to make a game like that on this site. One good thing about this is that you can play it in your browser. Just like other games on the site. So what do you think.

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago
I'm liking that your writing is much easier to read than the last time you posted. Make sure you capitalize Japan next time and throw a question mark at the end. Your spelling is great though.

As for the idea, I'm not crazy about it but if you could work story into it somehow then it could be a decent idea, I'd suggest working on something a little less mechanical and a lot more fluid but if you're passionate about this, then by all means, go for it!

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago

We can be sure this one isn't Bob.  I like that.

Totally listen to this man, Tyler.  He knows the process inside and out.  And also, he's not a douche, which is very important.

As for your story, I'd agree with JJJ here, and though there probably aren't many/any of those on this site, it's been done.  Overdone, in my opinion.  In any case, good luck with whatever you end up writing.

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago
Zero might not know the advanced editor inside and out, but he's equally not a douche, so listen to him too. Haha!

(Don't listen to Anubis because he is a d--)

Everyone's cool.

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago

Hi Tyler! I'm a dick!

Anyway, go for it son. If you want to make an actually good dating sim, moar power to you. You don't have to use the advanced editor, but definitely make the story deep and split multiple ways. And everyone loves Japanese Hentai Sims, so---

What? No Hentai? What do you...?

Alright, kid, look. If you're going to make a sim, it needs hentai!!!

 

loljk Good luck and Merry Christmas!

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago
No hentai, not on CYS. Anubis, don't give him any stupid misconceptions.

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago

No I know. Hence the joke part of that whole thing.

One thing to keep in mind if you want to make this story actually GOOD, Tyler: VARIETY. Don't just have a couple "incorrect" parts of dialogue and one "correct" part of dialogue. That's called linear, and it takes the fun out of CYOA's. Have the characters react differently to different responses in noticable ways. Also, don't keep things predictable. Have seemingly random events that change dialogue or your relationship to the girl(s).

Just some tips. I look forward to your non-Hentai CYOA!

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago

Yeah, sorry. Endmaster has exclusive licence on hentai.

Dating simulation CYOA! What do you think?

16 years ago

lol Monopolies suck. But at least End keeps it all on IS, so at least he abides by NIMBY.