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Questions about a storygame? Thoughts on Eternal? Any other IF you're playing out there?

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My second story has now been published . Much better than the first . Give it a shot ?

Its called Mind Games .

Feedback would be great as well.

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Moved this to the parlor room. Btw, you don't need spaces before punctuation :)

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But I like to . It makes it clearer don't you think ?

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I have to say it's a little distracting.

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When there's the same amount of space between the end of sentence period and the beginning of the next sentence, it is rather confusing.

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Well I have REpublished it just a second ago. I fixed the space problems, gramar, a few minor plot holes and made the puzzle easier for those who where stuck. I figured people were getting stuck because lots of people had played the game but not finished it. Much more improved in other words. But don't expect new pages, thats a major update not a minor one. Have put in new paragraphs on a page but thats minor I reckon. It's all good.

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i'll get to reading it pretty soon, promise

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I bet you haven't read it yet ugilick, your promise counts for nothing! :)

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I will go read it ASAP.

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You know, Ugilick may have read it an just not commented?

Or yea.... maybe he's just a big liar face :P

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I rated did not comment.

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Exactly. I do this a lot too. I usually rata, then go read the comments that were made and if I have nothing to add, I say nothing.