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This is a very adult, def not PG or PC story I started years ago and have decided to continue working on and finish.

Anyone who is interested, and not easily offended, please take a look and give some feedback if so inclined.

It is far from done.

Here is the link:

https://chooseyourstory.com/story/viewer/default.aspx?StoryId=53485

Thanks in advance and again, this is not for the faint of heart.

You don't appear to have the story in sneak peek, so only mods can use that link.

Also, nobody let Naz near this game, she'll start using asterisks again.

I did not realize that!  Thank you, Miz.

Does this one work?

https://chooseyourstory.com/story/cherry-falls~3a-a-tale-to-remember

Story seems to not be there. Maybe you have the link wrong. Obviously I won't be clicking on anything not from CYS on the off chance this is a scam where you post a fake CYS link and hten say, "Oh, okay, try this link," or if it has mimic characters. Naturally. But in all seriousness, if it's unpublished and you want feedback, I think you should allow sneak peak to be turned on in your story's settings.

Links were not working, I put it into sneak peek mode.

Again, not for the faint of heart, but any feedback would be appreciated.

I'll look at it probably tomorrow. If I can find it. So far, no luck.

This thread literally just died and EZ hasn't logged back in again.

I think all the "not for the faint hearted" stuff oversold it a bit, it's edgy in an over the top ridiculous way that loops around to funny, or at least attempts to be funny. However he ONLY wrote out those choices so he might have gotten bored with the more mundane parts of the plot.

Oh I guess he never actually got around to putting it in Sneak Peek either, no wonder nobody read it. Well that's a big L.

At first, I thought it was weaponized incompetence, but maybe it was that he just couldn't defeat the procrastination worm.

Well looks like someone doesn't get a mention in the CYS history update!

There, you've seen the highlights.

That last choice lmao. Definitely would have earned at least one additional rating point from me.

I mean it looked like one of the more promising edgelord stories we've had on here and I gave him some advice on stuff. (Rare for me to do in general)

Who knows though maybe he'll be back on a more permanent basis next season.