A day in the life of Matt, a 20 something year old man whose mental faculties are so strained that they may snap at any moment.
[EDIT: 2014: I wrote this story to test the functionality of the basic editor, way back when I first joined in 2003. So take it for what it is. My humor runs toward the dark and the black, so you may not find it as amusing as I. At the time, I had been in my late 20's, living with the most irritating person in the entire world. So, so, so irritating. This story was a way for me to sublimate my understandable urges to kill her into a socially acceptable outlet. The parts of the story which are true include her complaining that the smell of bacon and the sight of grease was the same as "boiling animal fat and toxic fumes," all the while attempting to make subtle sexual advances and holding the fact that she was my landlord over my head. The situation ended badly, but not as badly as in the story.
v 1.0 Published story, 2003.
v 2.0 Updated some things, fixed a broken link, added a bit of content, probably created discrepancies.
You were a good boy. But then you turned bad. Drug addict, cop-killer, manipulator; These are all names you could be called. But Leon helped you hide the evidence, and you were never caught for your crimes.
You, who were once so far gone yourself, now help others. You take care of them when no one else will. And yet that creature who first strayed from the path of righteousness has not disappeared. It is still part of you, a dark psychosis threatening to get out. You sometimes hear its voice at night, whispering while you try to fall asleep. An eternal battle between the dark and the light rages within your mind.
To which side will you listen during this most crucial of days?
This is an advanced game where you create a character, choosing four of seven unique traits and distributing 100 points between your three stats however you see fit. These stats and traits make for a different experience every time you adventure through the story. Stats have a direct effect on how useful each trait is in various situations, so choose a wise combination! The back-end is extremely complex, with nearly one hundred variables and over thirty unique scripts which track and update your progress, viewable on your character sheet. This sheet lists and keeps track of accomplishments you have made throughout the story, as well as updating your health, score, and any information you might find. The story also boasts twenty-three items, most useable in more ways than one, and over twenty-five distinct endings, each crowning the player with a unique title, although only three allow completion of the story. Every item's graphic has been put through Photoshop, and photos have been placed strategically throughout the 400 pages and 600 links to augment the setting, realism, and mood. Readers will rarely be prompted to use an item; rather, they will have to reason and analyze to determine the appropriate point at which to do so. Finally, if a particular reader gains special accomplishments, they will be in bold on the character sheet, and that reader will gain extra points! Try to get 1000!
Good luck, and enjoy!
CAVEAT: This story contains graphic violence, sexual images, adult situations, offensive speech by many standards, murdered police officers, and drug use.
If you are too young to handle this wildly inappropriate drivel, please do not read the story. And don't kill anyone.
v. 1.4 (2022) Minor bug fixes including sudden death on character creation. Agree with slapping in a reset link without any real conclusion to the story is annoying, and really, quite sloppy. To be fixed. The issue is that I started tinkering with the story, adding symbols, and even created a website to do some pre-meta meta type sequel. The gateway to this sequel - outside the story - required the code from the item in the story. Once unlocked, I'd planned an online CYOA, which would then lead back here. I had the site up and had started writing some stuff.
Most people were confused and didn't understand how to use the symbol, although some scratchy clever ones like Tanstaafl did. Apparently I had made the references too subtle and the website had about 3 visitors. The sequel story wasn't finished. Then a gruesome, kick-in-the-nuts life tsunami happened which hurled me - or sucked me, depending on how you look at it, into a vortex of hell, where I have been living ever since. I have now clawed my way to the surface.
Despite there being no call whatsoever for me to actually carry out these years old plans, I plan to fix the rushed parts, some of the coding errors, and make other important changes.
The path cannot be found, exactly. But it does change the story. You cannot accept this, yet.
- Entire new story line added, with secret items to be found throughout story. The items portend a sequel which is only obliquely related to this one, and without these items one cannot logically progress.
- Fixed major bug allowing readers to exploit statistics. Thanks those who PM'd me after reading that I'd prefer that than posting on the main forums.
- Fixed multiple typos/variable issues/grammatical errors.
- Minor updates to items and setting to reflect current societal technology.
- Fixed multiple instances where traits could be used when user did not have them or stats were not high enough.
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Recent PostsWelcome To the Board! on 5/20/2022 2:32:00 AM
"Oh my God," Ignatius said. "I'm so old!"
List of any pages linked to a specific page on 2/16/2022 3:26:55 PM
Hey BZ! Good to see you. Great work on the site. I'm in the process of relearning and getting a sense of the logic I had in the variables, scripts, etc. Once I grasp what I was doing, I should be able to fix it. I can't reproduce the bugs when getting stopped by the cop so far (read that in the comments)
List of any pages linked to a specific page on 2/15/2022 6:43:50 PM
Hey, thanks Darius_Conwrig, glad you enjoyed it. Good to know my twisted story was a happy childhood memory.
List of any pages linked to a specific page on 2/15/2022 3:49:00 PM
I don't know enough about coding so I'll take your word for it. Thanks.
List of any pages linked to a specific page on 2/15/2022 2:47:00 PM
The amount of dicerolls and scripts Mommy uses is astounding to me. It has unfortunately been years since I scripted on here and I am trying to recall if there is a way to see where every page links.
For example, let's say you have a page called "The End."
Is there a way to see a list of every page that links to that page?
I want to fix some of the sloppy, rushed parts and make the purpose of the talisman much more obvious.
The CYS Political Chart on 2/15/2022 12:06:46 AM
I stole that from Bugsy McGoo of Game of Thrones fame.
How to convey emotions without a body on 2/14/2022 11:59:23 PM
First, I disagree that "show don't tell" is a maxim that must be followed at all costs in all fiction writing.
Second, if the POV can't show anything you have no story, so consider some ways you can show.
First person is going to give you a very strong voice but with two first person voices it could become quite confusing for the reader.
As far as how the POV can show with no body:
Perhaps the POV does not lose all control at first, but rather slowly as the player gains control. Or the POV is constantly fighting and can occasionally move one extremity to cause violently hilarious situations. The player can also evidently "hear" his voice, right, so the POV can be saying snide things like "If I had control of my left eyebrow, I'd be raising it." Or the player could feel a chill up his spine or sneeze unexpectedly. Or become dizzy. Various mechanics could be used, and you could always consider that the taking over of the POV blends their minds in a way that it is difficult to tell one from the other, both from the player and POV's perspectives.
The CYS Political Chart on 2/14/2022 11:50:47 PM
You have always been my favorite.
The CYS Political Chart on 2/14/2022 11:49:54 PM
Two backhanded compliments are better than one, I always say.
The CYS Political Chart on 2/14/2022 11:45:05 PM
Alive, finally, and I've waded into a theocratic era. Excellent. Thanks re Mommy. About time I write something else, although I couldn't help but tinker a bit with it. I've forgotten most of the coding.