Can Anybody Escape?

The story intro makes this sound like it is a really good story. However, once you get into the story, there’s not a lot there. Yes, this has a lot of options. I really do appreciate that you can make some choices and the choices have an effect on the game: that’s what CYOA stories are supposed to do! But at the same time, each page leaves a little to be desired. The story is kind of flat as there’s not a lot there. There are choices, but they don’t have a lot of depth to them.

I think this story has great potential and really could be adapted and advanced to a top quality story on this site. That would require making more of a story here with more backgrounds for the characters, maybe some character development, and lots more details and descriptions on each page. The author could include all five senses in the story and describe more about what the main character is seeing, hearing, smelling, and feeling throughout the story, without even really needing to change a lot of the options and paths. If each page were expanded by about 500 words, this could really be an engaging story. Thank you for sharing it with the site.

This was an interesting idea and had basically good spelling and grammar. Sadly two main points stood out to me. Firstly most of the pages were single lines followed by choices. Secondly it seems to mostly be 'pick a random option' due to no description or info to base it off and the wrong option was always an auto-death.

If you flesh out the descriptions a bit and cut back on the Iinsta-deaths for random choices it could be good

FINALLY… this game is literally SO difficult! It took, like, a dozen tries!!

WHY IS THIS GAME SO HARD

It was fine… I suppose?

It’s definitely fun but lacks essence

6/8

It really is worh every penny (or should i say my treasure...)
The story has good background and many endings. There is not even 1 grammatical error in sight, though I think it should be a tad bit longer. Thanks for hearing me out.

Good! But, “A Mermaid!?”

this game is so fumado

It was a fun game to go through. It was a bit bare descriptively and plot-wise. I do like the abundance of choices.