Everlasting Darkness

This wasn't horrible, the author clearly put some effort in but at the same time, there were some issues. The author sometimes attempted to use a multitude of adjectives which gave the impression that he thesaurus hunted and at other times seemed too rush to proofread. In addition, the character motivation was entirely unclear. Why did the vampire suddenly fall in love with me? I knew her for a grand total of one hour. Also, it was unclear that I wasn't a vampire from the start, as the description page leads me to believe that I am. Furthermore, it was unrealistic how simple it was to find out and how my character didn't struggle with the thought that the girl he'd just gone home with was a vampire... Seriously, how was that not more shocking to him? It felt very thrown together and like the author was trying to advance the plot, not trying to immerse the reader.

very good

Please make a second part to this!

This was very sad and predictable. Made 5 moves. Died.

"This is directed at a male audience so females beware!"...yeah, it probably isn't a great idea to tell your audience that you're excluding nearly half of them from reading it. Just a heads up, it's pretty unprofessional.

The formatting and grammar was pretty bad towards the beginning, but incredibly it improved towards the end. In fact, after you become a vampire the story gets better. I have no idea why that would be the case. Maybe the author became a prolific vampire writer in real life or something.

After that, the story shuffles forward a bit and bounces between a bunch of dead-end routes before coming to another end which didn't sit well with me either. Eh, it could be better but there were some parts which were good enough.

It doesn't have a lot of choices, and I could only find one ending. (Other than death)

It was good! I rated it even better than recess cups. It was short for my liking, but I am wondering in I should try again...

This game gives you no choice! How is this a "choose your own adventure game" when the only choice is to do what the author wants you to do or die? Stay away from the story. Stay faaaaar away.

To short but amusing momentarily

Both awful endings good story base