Final Destination: Cheating Death

The stroyline is very disjointed and the option which led the reader to win before the actual story even started confused me. I feel like the story was too fast-paced and the author should have fleshed out the story with more detail, but with a little more effort, the author could turn this story into a great Goosebumps-like adventure.

There were numerous grammatical errors. At least one every sentence, because you didn't space after a comma or period (which is vital!!) Also, there were quite a few spelling errors and you forgot to start a new paragraph in dialogue. Basic grammar, people! The story was decent, but there was still too much to read, and combo'd with bad grammar and a strange stroyline, it made me just skip through most of the game ot get to an End Game link.

A decent take on a crappy movie. The opening scene was nicely worded. The other comment about the he/she thing is true. Try using paragraphs for the dialogue so it's easier to read. The deaths could be more creative; most of them involve things falling on heads and getting tackled out of the way.

Peak

i loved it all the different choices

Stay away far far away

Well

very, very boring to play with friends

Rushed, but fun

yeh