Final Destination: Cheating Death

The stroyline is very disjointed and the option which led the reader to win before the actual story even started confused me. I feel like the story was too fast-paced and the author should have fleshed out the story with more detail, but with a little more effort, the author could turn this story into a great Goosebumps-like adventure.

There were numerous grammatical errors. At least one every sentence, because you didn't space after a comma or period (which is vital!!) Also, there were quite a few spelling errors and you forgot to start a new paragraph in dialogue. Basic grammar, people! The story was decent, but there was still too much to read, and combo'd with bad grammar and a strange stroyline, it made me just skip through most of the game ot get to an End Game link.

A decent take on a crappy movie. The opening scene was nicely worded. The other comment about the he/she thing is true. Try using paragraphs for the dialogue so it's easier to read. The deaths could be more creative; most of them involve things falling on heads and getting tackled out of the way.

I loved this game. I’m bad at doing comments so I’ll just say that.

Make a longer version please.

Very interesting plot

I LOVE IT! It's So Descriptive, And Amazing! Though Some Of Them Are Sorta Like Knockoff Versions Of Deaths In The Movie, It's Really Great!!

I loved it

dude like i understan how death wins but i saved everyone you should have it remember who was saved and make it matter and make it long so it keeps going and going until it starts making you choose who to save and eventually you die but it was to quick

it was gud