A day in the life of Matt, a 20 something year old man whose mental faculties are so strained that they may snap at any moment.

[EDIT: 2014: I wrote this story to test the functionality of the basic editor, way back when I first joined in 2003. So take it for what it is. My humor runs toward the dark and the black, so you may not find it as amusing as I. At the time, I had been in my late 20's, living with the most irritating person in the entire world. So, so, so irritating. This story was a way for me to sublimate my understandable urges to kill her into a socially acceptable outlet. The parts of the story which are true include her complaining that the smell of bacon and the sight of grease was the same as "boiling animal fat and toxic fumes," all the while attempting to make subtle sexual advances and holding the fact that she was my landlord over my head. The situation ended badly, but not as badly as in the story.

Enjoy.]

v 1.0 Published story, 2003.

v 2.0 Updated some things, fixed a broken link, added a bit of content, probably created discrepancies.

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tsmpaul was a brilliant lunatic with the gaming portion. I learned a lot about combat and items from that article. 

An old man dodders in, drooling over a massive staff. He shakes a gnarled claw in Ford's direction.

"IRRELEVANT!" he screams.

Every human is a shaved monkey. All will become corrupted by greed and power. The thing to do is force unlucky humans, via Federal lottery, to take over key roles in government. There would be exclusions, like no one under 30 or over 75. The rigged lottery will have me as President, obviously, Mr. T as Ambassador to China, and Schwarzenegger for Interior or Homeland Security, but the rest will be fair and random. Everyone gets a three week crash course in how to run a bloated government bureaucracy during the transition. It's mainly backroom deals and lobbyist slush funds, so this is the fun part of the 3-6 years in office.  

"Oh my God," Ignatius said. "I'm so old!"

Hey BZ! Good to see you. Great work on the site. I'm in the process of relearning and getting a sense of the logic I had in the variables, scripts, etc. Once I grasp what I was doing, I should be able to fix it. I can't reproduce the bugs when getting stopped by the cop so far (read that in the comments)

Hey, thanks Darius_Conwrig, glad you enjoyed it. Good to know my twisted story was a happy childhood memory.

I don't know enough about coding so I'll take your word for it. Thanks.

The amount of dicerolls and scripts Mommy uses is astounding to me. It has unfortunately been years since I scripted on here and I am trying to recall if there is a way to see where every page links. 

For example, let's say you have a page called "The End."

Is there a way to see a list of every page that links to that page?

I want to fix some of the sloppy, rushed parts and make the purpose of the talisman much more obvious.

I stole that from Bugsy McGoo of Game of Thrones fame.

First, I disagree that "show don't tell" is a maxim that must be followed at all costs in all fiction writing.

Second, if the POV can't show anything you have no story, so consider some ways you can show.

First person is going to give you a very strong voice but with two first person voices it could become quite confusing for the reader.

As far as how the POV can show with no body:

Perhaps the POV does not lose all control at first, but rather slowly as the player gains control. Or the POV is constantly fighting and can occasionally move one extremity to cause violently hilarious situations. The player can also evidently "hear" his voice, right, so the POV can be saying snide things like "If I had control of my left eyebrow, I'd be raising it." Or the player could feel a chill up his spine or sneeze unexpectedly. Or become dizzy. Various mechanics could be used, and you could always consider that the taking over of the POV blends their minds in a way that it is difficult to tell one from the other, both from the player and POV's perspectives.

You have always been my favorite.