Finding A Suitor

The writing is solid, but the game requires a large suspension of disbelief when it comes to historical details. For example:

- In 1821, the common dress waist was still empire, though fashion was slowly changing. By the end of the decade a strongly corseted red dress with a wide skirt would have been the height of fashion, but definitely not in 1821 where flowy empire gowns and pastels were more common.

- At a ball, the parents would never abandon their child that soon. She would have been introduced to their friends, and probably sat near them. They would be the ones to introduce her to any gentleman, or perhaps a friend of the gentleman that she had already been introduced to. A man introducing himself (like Charles did) would be innapropriate.

- At a ball, the woman would have a dance card. It wouldn't be appropriate to dance with the same man more than two or three times - even if they were engaged or married.

- For an unengaged woman to let a man kiss her at an event would risk a ruined reputation where no man would marry her. The option that *should* have led to Rose being an old maid would be letting Charles kiss her, not refusing him.

Just a bit more research would help this feel more authentic and the consequences be more realistic.

Okay, this story was short and fairly nice. Given the story length, I liked the characterization, though it could have been expanded if the story was longer.

I think I found all the endings? There were four, I hope. I know little to nothing about the Georgian Era in England barring some industrialization, so I'm not looking to see if this is historically accurate.
Okay, so the ending I got first was the Earl ending, where Rose and the Earl get together with one kid and live happily ever after. It's fairly cute. I think, considering the Earl's personality, that maybe they should have had talked a bit more and cemented knowing each other, but this is all happening in one night so I'll let it slide.
Second one was with Charles (Charlie, I don't remember his name), who ends up cheating on you if you get his ending. I was kind of disappointed in this one? I would have liked more signs that it might have ended up like this. Maybe Charles is always looking at some other girls while you talk, or he says something that might trigger some red flags.
John ending was nice too, although the confrontation with his ex was surprising. I feel like there could have been more done with him, but as he is currently is fine.
I'm also kind of disappointed in the Rose alone ending. Maybe instead of dying bitter and alone, she could try finding love that's not necessarily romantic? Orphanages, adoption, or just talking with maids and butlers.

Grammar and punctuation were great, very solid. A couple of sentences didn't sound right, but they weren't very noticeable.
Your use of the editor is very seamless, and I didn't find any faults with it.

I think there should have been more time with Amelie. I liked her. I liked her a lot. Maybe another girl, friend or love interest or sister or otherwise, could have been someone Rose could have spent time with (it'd also change up the Rose alone ending, because that girl seems like she'd have a lot of friends).

Ultimately rating this a 4 for the endings and story length, though for your first game it's really good! It's says you're a historical fiction fan, so I hope to see more from you in the future. ;)

No confusion, just a simple romance.

So um, my story ended up being really short, but I'm not supposed to be up anyway right now so erm- actually forget that. I found the story surprisingly sweet and simple. Though Like I said earlier it's just a little too short for my preference. It's my biased opinion I suppose, maybe other people like it better as a short little story but I like spending more time on a story. Then again I'm also writing this at 12 in the morning so I'm tired as crap. Anyways thanks for letting me write a comment down on this story, I did enjoy reading it, even if it didn't last long. (Though I'm also a very fast reader lol).

Felt quite rushed near the end, as if the author needed to fill in the empty space. If you want something quick and easy to read I'd recommend it.

Very cute story!

its ok,, kinda boring

Bad

Its fine but why does the viscount ending suck so much

It's a beautiful little game with a few pleasing outcomes that just warms my heart.