Football dream

Written way too quickly.

Whom ever voted "good...for you to poop on" was mistaken. It's way less.

This just took me 5 seconds to finish.

Literally took me 8 seconds and 50 milliseconds. Great job, you made someone pissed.

This is as much a story as football is a respectable sport. 1/8.

This entire thing reads like someone describing a very bare bones outline for a story idea they had. The story itself never makes an appearance at any point.

Finished in less than a minute. Probably written in less than 10.

I don't know how you can have a realistic story about being a football star and not have the option to brutally stab your wife to death.

Hell, even the option of knocking her out in an elevator would have been acceptable.

Easiest free point ever.

:P You need a good, catchy PLOT. Plus you need to write more and choose more for the reader. Good for a first story