Life as a teenager

Well the first page doesn’t really set the expectations high. I’m not sure why it sucks to be me, but apparently it does. That might be more effective if reasons were given there as part of the story. The story could show things that have happened, perhaps; or could even show the things as they happen so I feel like it sucks to be me instead of simply being told it completely out of character and out of the flow of the story. In fact, I think you really could leave out all the parenthetical phrases throughout the entire story and that would actually improve the story.

I am glad there are at least choices in the story that appear to have an effect on the story: that’s a key to a good cyoa story. The pictures were a nice addition to the story in some places. It was an okay story based on a reasonable idea. It was a little preachy, but I guess that was the point of the story. I’m not sure one hit on a joint when you’re drunk will ensure that you’re a life-long drug addict in jail, but whatever, it’s your story.

Overall this was a nice attempt at a story with good branching and reasonable writing. I think it could be a bit improved with some more detailed writing and additional descriptions. Thank you for sharing the story with the site.

I'm honestly a bit concerned that you needed the help of three co-authors or write something so short and small.

First off, we did have some branching here. Definitely not a lot, but there was some, so I guess that part was alright. However, the branching that there was felt a bit lazy, as if you put a lot of effort into one path and then decided to rush the others so you could publish as soon as possible.

I guess it's a simple little story about being a teenager, but a lot of choices were completely illogical, and your character was able to have multiple split personalities through the story. If you can muster the courage to make fun of your friend for being retarded, with tons of people watching, how did this character even get friends in the first place?

The grammar wasn't as good as it should have been. Short stories like this generally shouldn't have many grammar mistakes since they're so easy to proofread.

Most of the endings were completely random and illogical.

And, also, to be honest i'm a bit confused about the story in general. It was incredibly linear and confusing.

I feel like i'm being very generous giving this a 2/8.

Very good

Um, you literally just sit there and be a human being like the whole game was just stupid. "You got the best ending!" meanwhile my friend=in a mental home and my other friend is drugged out? Stupidest game.

It ended in a terrible way, and wouldn't let me be who I wanted to be! Terrible, terrible game!

It was okay... I wish it had more options and that it was longer and more interesting. Great job though

This is a nice story

There were multiple repeats and it didn't make complete sense. But it was good

I’m surprised this took so many people to do

I thourgoughtly enjoyed this one man, it was just amazing. As a cool feind of drugs and stuff, can reccomend this was my highschool like and middle life. i enjy choclate :). Tanks.