Snake Eyes

pshh. short needs to be longer

This storygame, like so many others on this site, feels like it had some potentially good ideas but it just wasn't detailed enough. It's all so fleeting that I can't really get attached to any of the characters or feel too strongly about the (weak) plot.

This storygame is probably trying to be lighthearted and short rather than a serious days-long read, and I appreciate that, but it still feels like you could have made it better by making it longer. If you write in dialogue by the characters themselves, it can bring them to life. In this kind of story it would also be a great opportunity to inject humour into it.

At least this storygame is relatively well written with little to no writing errors.

Short but sweet.

Don't lissen to what other people say, I really enjoyed this story. Please continue write.

okay never expected this.

way too short and the story line doesn't make sense i guess but other then that it was pretty good

Way too random with some of the earlier game choices and rather short for the branching endings

Needs work. 1/8. But thumbs up on the creativity.

...random.

ehh.. that pretty much sums it up. either ye go in to be daring & brave to impress, or be a coward & die. extremely way too short (barely started to get into it & then it ended).