The Murder Mystery

This was a good attempt and I like the effort. There were two main problems that really ruined it for me. First and foremost, the grammar was terrible. You need to watch your tenses. You switch from past to present in mid sentence and it destroys immersion. Beyond that though, the motivation wasn't there. Why did she lead me on a goose chase just for her to tell me in the end? Why did I have to see her brothers? How did the ambulance driver know about her childhood death wishes? Why did she have childhood death wishes? There are about 1000 plot holes and that happens when you've got an idea for the plot and force it to go that way, its better to let it flow from character motivation. Still, good effort and keep trying.

I loved it.It had everything.I want you to create a sequel.

3

Even though it had a cuss in it i love it! R.I.P Karen tho.

don't give in

It was okay.

Nice

What the actual fuck. Donde esta el grammar???

Some of the parts made no sense, like his friend being mad at him for a mistake of some sort. Probably having him questioned and searched? The first time I played it I failed though, which is cool haha

Er.. You said that the maturity level was 4/8, even though the word f*cking was in it, and other words that children cannot see.. I think that you should set the maturity level to 7/8 ASAP before any children read those words and ask their parents what it means.