The Murder of Mary Jane Kelly PART ONE INTRODUCTION

A mystery / thriller storygame by esmeefallen

Player Rating3.26/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 32 ratings since
Played times (finished )

Story Difficulty5/8

"Run through the jungle"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level4/8

"Need to be accompanied by an adult"

Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Tags

Serious

Entire Summary: Mary Jane Kelly, beloved sweetheart to all had just been murdered. No one could figure out the murderer even the police so the family hired their own private detective onto the scene. You. In this small tale you will encounter many things and when you get closer to the murderer, the things that mattered most to you were put to the test. Can you catch Mary Jane Kelly's murderer before it's too late? or will you perish the way Mary done?

Rated: A very high teen

Genres: Crime/Drama/Angst

Note: I wish I can use real pictures of people, but alas I couldn't; so I will be using animated pictures of people, I will not own those. Just this story plot and original characters.

THIS IS PART ONE

SHORT, BUT IT'S THE INTRODUCTION.

PART TWO IS NOW IN THE PROGRESS!

Player Comments

In addition, the age reading can be considered to be about the same audience of the Hunger Games and other books : teens. I don't find any content that requires the consent of an adult to watch, so the age rating for older teens isn't needed.

Your branches are somewhat linear, as multiple links can lead to one page, but your variety isn't overwhelming, and the paths a player can take make logical sense so far.

Overall, I can say that this story is interesting, but it will need improvements on the aspects of choice, length, and audience target.

A piece of advice : if you're going to have multiple endings on this game, do make sure that you take extreme care to make several beginnings in part 2 that will correspond with part 1 endings.

— Swiftstryker on 1/23/2014 4:12:18 AM with a score of 0

A good start but waaaaay to short. never publish an an complete story.

— BigRonn77 on 11/29/2016 10:21:43 AM with a score of 0

The starting font was a little much and the sudden ending was horibal, in the end there was no story or game play every action leads to the same ending and it's very short.

— Dmanxbox on 5/7/2015 7:43:31 PM with a score of 0

cool

— Scrappydoo1996 on 5/20/2014 1:04:38 PM with a score of 0

Synopsis has me intrigued, as well as your diction and your style. As for the genres, I don't see a reason to put in angst if there's no inner conflict in the variable character we play as. There's no ground to say this is related to angst in any way.

— Swiftstryker on 1/23/2014 4:06:12 AM with a score of 0

Putting (Your name here) Is terrible.
Give the player a name.
I cant immerse my self if I am "nameless protagonist one"