A Picnic Lunch

Player Rating2.99/8

"#833 overall, #103 for 2014"
based on 126 ratings since 10/29/2014
played 1,964 times (finished 150)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Tags

Humor

You are going on a picnic with your family. It is supposed to be a wonderfully happy afternoon for you all. Things take an unexpected twist and everything goes drastically wrong. Will you survive this picnic lunch? 

WARNING: Clowns... well only sometimes

Player Comments

After I read this story, I had the urge to slam my head against a wall.

This storygame is just so illogical and weird, and it was completely random. This is what happens when you try to make a humorous game about murderous clowns, I suppose.

It's completely illogical, for example: how was someone able to pick out every sprinkle in my ice cream sundae and throw a bunch of dehydrated super bugs on it? More importantly, how did nobody notice?

The whole clowns thing was way too cliche and dumb, I mean, I can't tell you how many stories i've seen about murderous dolls and clowns and shit. If you'd actually had some character development and a plot better then eating lunch and surviving clown attacks, it might have been somewhat decent.

Also, I think someone might be able to notice dozens of clowns creeping up behind them, no?

1/8.
-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 7:00:00 PM with a score of 0
This can hardly be counted as a horror game. It doesn't set the mood at all, and the attempted scares fall about three lightyears from their mark.

Your writing is childish and unrefined and there are way, way too many grammar and spelling issues. You constantly mix up your and you're. It's really not that hard. Your for possession and you're for you are.

The plot is nearly nonexistent and completely absurd. The horror games that excel are ones that feel like they could really happen. They put the reader in the mind of the protagonist, feeling the events of the story as if they were really happening. This story doesn't at all do that.

Additionally, the choices offered are unrealistic as well. There was clearly much more effort put into the sunny area branch, and almost every path feels like it's incomplete and rushed.
-- Megumeme on 12/17/2019 5:49:57 PM with a score of 0
I can't believe it, I've been turned into a CLOWN!
-- Jaiden James Samples on 3/17/2019 10:06:36 PM with a score of 0
I-I'm just so confused...This story is so completely illogical that it's more like a weird dream than a story. Please try to make something better that follows an actual story.
-- abchi on 11/15/2018 8:56:18 AM with a score of 0
SPOILER ALERT!!!

Hmmm... Maybe if the story explained more about where and why the clowns and bugs coincide. Or do they coincide?
-- Quorrah on 9/18/2018 5:08:09 PM with a score of 0
So at first, I thought you would need a personal editor. But after playing your game I realize you need a different kind of personal help. Also, why isn't there an option to join a terrorist group and kill the clowns? What the fuck guys. I really disliked this because ISIS was not apart of it. I think to help this story I would add ISIS (of course) I would also add some sonic OCs just saying.
-- Luwen on 6/7/2018 12:23:32 PM with a score of 0
Well it's exciting. I can't figure out how to make it as long as it says it is, I never make it far
-- Anactaka on 6/5/2018 12:03:49 PM with a score of 0
Gah! There was NO WAY I was going to sacrifice the children. >:-(
-- Anactaka on 6/5/2018 12:01:38 PM with a score of 0
I chose the sundae to keep it from melting! Grr.
-- Anactaka on 6/5/2018 11:58:50 AM with a score of 0
really really bad :( 2/8
-- Linda on 12/5/2017 3:42:31 AM with a score of 0
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