Player Comments on Date Rape Laws and Prevention

Wait a minute, in three of the possible endings you avoid rape, but you’re still friendly with the rapist which means you’re just going to potentially get date raped when you go out with him again later since he’s the one that was trying to drug the drink in the first place.

You should have had further choices where you go out with this guy again or even put into other potential dangerous situations.

I mean this is a complex issue and there are all sorts of ways this sort of danger should be explored to avoid being raped. Lives are at stake.

As it stands there are four endings and only one of them leads to rape. So while this project had good intentions, it seems like a really big missed opportunity to make a larger story with more opportunities to get date raped.

I admire the reasoning behind a game like this, it makes a lot of sense to educate people on ways to protect themselves and prevent harm from happening to them. I'm with most of the commentors on the fact that the story had too little detail to be engaging, I felt like I was attending a workshop than actually reading a story, which detracts from its entertainment value and how interested I will be throughout playing this game. If the whole point is to get as many people as possible to play this game, the lack of interest will definitely be an obstacle to that goal.

On top of that, and here I'm a little worried that I may be a little too PC, but this game had a victim-blaming quality that I was very, very uncomfortable with, especially the last page with "advice" on what NOT to do as a potential victim. Look, I don't deny potential victims, all of us, should educate ourselves on what NOT to do in case it puts ourselves in danger, but especially when it comes to rape, where victims are often lectured by friends, family and society with a whole list of "why didn't you do this...or why didn't you do that?", it would have been useful to make extremely clear that none of this advice detracts from culpability or blame. Enough young women and some men have to deal with shit from society for being "stupid" or "putting themselves in that position" without a game seemingly reinforcing all of that.

Also, just a suggestion, wouldn't it be good to have a game on the opposite side of the equation? So, so many guys don't have a clue how to tell when someone else "consents" to an act, they think consent works in the negative (ie silence means consent) or they think having sex with a really drunk person isn't rape when all that is just totally untrue. Potential rapists also have thousands of misconceptions about what does or doesn't count as consent, would have been nice to see that discussed as well.

Let me preface this by saying that I come to this site to escape the monotony of "real life". I was let down by this story, so I thought I'd return some of that feeling to the author(s).

The characters were one dimensional, if even that, so I attempted to put myself in their shoes (which would be out of character, not to mention against the laws of physics!) and tried to imagine how any of this was plausible (especially the dancing).

You have the rules of writing (ie. grammar, punctuation and spelling) down pat so I can't fault you for that, but I didn't feel that there was any passion behind this. The best way to get your story across (especially to younger readers) would be to encapsulate it in something that would capture their imagination and evoke emotion.

This'll probably get by on technicalities, but you should really rethink your story and turn it into something that will stick with readers while they go about their own humdrum lives.

hiiii...I didnt get raped?

I got raped lol.

I wonder why I'm even reading this. Oh well, it's fun enough though I sometimes question whether the term "date rape" is a little old-fashioned.

I mean, most perpetrators of rape are a person the victim knows and trusts in some way. It feels a bit redundant to have an extra term for that. Oh well, it's all pedantics anyway.

Remember, using date rape prevention tactics will actually transform nearby males into non-rapists. The default state is, of course, rapist. We can extrapolate this by considering the many endings of this story. If we do everything correctly, the same male as in the bad ending is a perfectly nice and good guy, otherwise not so much. Here we learn the very important lesson that the ending we get is all our fault.

I think that i basically gave it a good score cause i got a "good ending"

PD: i know it shouldn't be funny, but i caught a bit with the phrase "you did not got raped"

Alright, I have tried my hand at serious games in the past, including one focused on very similar themes. This was barely a game, the scenario was overly simplistic, limiting its usability. There was hardly any data in decision making to motivate you in one direction or another (e.g. nothing to tempt you to want to go out solo, to simulate how back decision making happens). There's no reason a player would project themselves in this format, and that imo really undermines the goal of this game.
I salute the intention but question the execution

So... In the "happy ending" I'm now dating an attempted rapist? ... Yey?

Well. I suppose his achieved the goal of telling me how now to get raped and the laws involved. Grammer and such was good. Seems kind of unnerving that there's a law that only helps female victims. Anyway, the project achieves its goal, and as a tall man in a good neighbourhood with this advice, I feel safer than ever.

Yay, I didn't get raped

Oh, and serious question: Why did it take three people to write nine short pages?

So did the character just get extremely drunk, or was the implication that the drink was always drugged? Because in thtat case, in the 'good' ending, she's still on friendly terms with an attempted rapist.

Anyway, this kind of thing is always hard to rate because while it's fine for its intended purpose, there's not much of a story here.

I'm assuming this was for a school project, but it's in the wrong category btw. Edutainment would be a better fit, 'School based' is for stories set in a school.

Very good for it's purpose. Of course there are lots of different situations as well as this example like drinking house parties and drinking alone with someone you think is safe, being pressured to take drugs and being drugged and robbed, also don't forget men can also fall victim to date raping from homosexual men or even women. This is well written, clear and does exactly what it sets out to do, I'm guessing this is a school project so you should get good marks for this :)

Very, Very Good!