Discovering Solinelia Island: Chapter 1

Player Rating3.60/8

"#573 overall, #55 for 2014"
based on 91 ratings since 08/04/2014
played 523 times (finished 96)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You have lived on Solinelia Island for your whole life, however you have been forbidden from leaving your village by your parents. Will you discover the hidden secrets of Solinelia Island?

This is Part One. If it receives enough encouragement, it will be continued.

Player Comments

This has a nice setup and a nice first page that really helps set the setting for the story. It is clearly expositional, but I think that works quite well on this page and this story. Sometimes that is just the best way to get the message across to the reader! I like the preparation and I’m not scared because an attack is clearly coming.

The descriptions on the different pages are quite engaging. I really like how you describe what’s happening and I do feel like I’m part of the story. I like the choices, even when the choices don’t appear to have a lot of an effect on the story itself. I even liked that some of the end story options gave me another chance. The way that was worded was nice.

Minor complaints: there were a lot of spaces between paragraphs on some pages, and that was annoying. There was a place where the font changed size and style a couple times that was distracting, too. I’m not completely sure why there were not zombie kitten smoothies in the story.

Packing my bag was fun and entertaining, too. I’m not sure that actually worked – I mean, I don’t think it had any effect. Perhaps that could have been enhanced with items or with variables to show what you’ve packed in your bag? Either way, this was a neat story with lots of potential. I’d love to see more of your writing and a chapter 2 some day.
-- Ogre11 on 6/28/2018 2:41:48 PM with a score of 0
I quite enjoyed this story. The beginning held a number of run on sentences and lack of spacing between dialogue, but by the middle of the story, you seemed to have fixed both of these problems. There were a small amount of spelling and grammar errors other than those mentioned, but not very many.

There could have been a lot more detail, especially about the fight with the dragon. The story in general seemed a little rushed. It also would have been nice to see some character development other than just winning the fight. The story almost seemed to play like a demo, rather than a part I to a story.

Overall, there were some funny moments and some good writing, but lots of flaws that I'm sure can be fixed. 5/8
-- Orange on 3/22/2017 12:31:58 AM with a score of 0
Sorry about the nickname, but I think that you should have the character encounter first meet a monster or a compromising situation and THEN end on a cliffhanger if you really insist to do it that way. However, the writing was fabulous and exactly my style :)
-- Sobriquet on 8/5/2020 9:06:43 PM with a score of 0
humorous. Like to see what's to come.
-- tokyoiqra on 12/18/2019 2:52:29 AM with a score of 0
I would like to see more of this story all in one game.
-- Faervel on 2/18/2019 2:58:36 PM with a score of 0
it is a good game
-- leonna on 2/13/2018 7:04:20 PM with a score of 0
great thanks
-- rhiannon on 1/24/2017 5:52:31 AM with a score of 0
This was a great 'Part 1' of a story, it set the tone well and let you know what you should be expecting from later installments.

That being said, I really don't like broken up stories that have no conclusion, you feel like you are getting an idea of the world, characters and story then suddenly get told it is over until the next installment which may be soon or... never, which has happened all too often on CYS.

Overall a great start, but maybe when you have part 2 ready, join them up into a single story rather than two small separate segments.
-- FeanorOnForge on 10/21/2016 1:17:22 PM with a score of 0
Shut down as soon as it got real. :( come on, it's mean to leave people hanging like that.
-- Dmanxbox on 12/25/2015 2:26:26 PM with a score of 0
More please
-- Lzark on 8/9/2015 8:21:19 PM with a score of 0
Show All Comments