Player Comments on Find the King

Alright then...

The first option I chose in this storygame made me restart, so there really is no point in that choice being there. I mean, it's on the first page. Hat's quite pointless since it just takes you back one single page.

There was a decent amount if links, but not really many choices at all. On just about every page there's the option to stand up, but for no real reason I feel dizzy and pass out. That's not the best way to write something.

The length was a bit dissapointing, but what made it even worse was the fact that there was only two sentences on each page. More detail would have been great.

For example, it says I was in a forest. What did this forest look like? Was it snowy? Rainy? Sunny? For all I know, this forest could have had chocolate trees.

I noticed about zero branching, and there were a ton of links that simply said "that was pointless" or "you pass out" and just take me backwards. If you're gonna out choices like that in the game, don't throw them on every second page.

Then there was some page were I had to find out which way was north. I chose "North" and then it said something like, "You found the king!" "Really?" "No, not really."
So... is there a reason I didn't find the king other then the author trolling me?

Every so often in this story you can choose a link, but then there's one sentence saying "Oh no you're so stupid you have to do this one!" Then forcing me to choose another one. Don't put "choices" like that. It's annoying.

This plot didn't make much sense to me. Waking up in a forest. Going on a quest to find a king. Deliver a potion. Save some girl. It's pretty much a cliche book with lolrandom humor every few pages.

Overall, 1/8. Try harder, please.

Where was the story in this again? You start out by not knowing anything and get killed for just putting on a watch. After a while of trying to look for a different ending, I forgot what the story was supposed to be and ended up just killing myself by putting the watch on again. I feel like there's no direction, and the sequence of events is completely unclear. There's no way to compare what's supposed to be happening to what's actually happening because I've seen no King, girl, or potion to speak of.

You were trying to be funny, and honestly it was at certain points, but you kind of failed at that overall. The weird speaking scenes, along with the fact that the narrator kept talking which made it confusing to read, and the overall story kind of held this game back.

"Find the king, get a potion, and rescue a girl." Where's the plot? I mean, it needs something more because I feel that this has been done before.

Finally, I died for stupid reasons at times. I put on a watch and I get a bullet in my head? Why? Who fired the gun in the first place?(Because you never explained that.)

Overall, you did have decent options to choose from and it was funny at times. This could have been a 6/8 game but the things I just stated really held this game back.

4/8

On a scale of 1 to Awesome, you're Super Great!

Ends super abruplty

Horrible game wth

I won within a minute
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Died from watch. I win.

An interesting story but a mish-mash of different things... they seem quite good things individually like the writing or the humour but I'd prefer these things together in something recognisable as a story. Pieces were good though.

I loved the humor (I love lost xD), it certainly made the game a lot better. The objective was linear and easy in my opinion.

Your logic sucks. Confusing storyline that makes no sense. Can't really comment on your language use, because the story was really quite short. No grammar issues though, so good for you.

not that good =(

... You had me pass out every time I stood up. That should annoy me, but for some reason, it was oddly interesting being confined to one spot like that. It just... didn't make enough sense for that premise to hold my interest long enough to keep looking for other endings.

To be honest, it is really a little short. But I LIKE the "funny" way u always say to end he game. GOOD
3/8

I can't make head or tail of this - 1/8

Not the worst game, but there were way too many parts that did not make sense.

You've got a decent control over the language but that doesn't make you a decent writer. You're funny at times, but mostly you're not funny and this wasn't a good story.

To be fair, it did make way more sense than the end of Lost :p

Wait, I meant mad, not nad.

… is my character nad? 'Cause that would make a lot of sense. Yes, more than Lost.

Is this a first, if it is, meh, if it isn't it sucks.

This didn't really make much sense. At least it was something to do, I guess.

Too short.You only got a 2 for moderately good grammar.

I thought it was hilarious. And although it was also a bit absurd, and brief, it was also better than Lost.

Fun, plotless, confusing, all in all feels like a failed parody of The Object.

I DID IT I WON

I'm confused, I died because I put a watch on?

It was funny at times, but short, and nonsensical. The King I understood, but the Potion and the Girl made no sense. I don't know if this was intentionally inane, or just lazy. Either way, this story could have used more work.

Had to start over 5 times.... Died for putting a watch on.... Um.... Confusion..

annoying

a terrable plot makes for a horrendious story. You tell the reader of a goal or objective. Then make it impossable to complete said objective. Can't tell if your trolling or just that bad. Please do better next time.

no comment

Not funny enough to be a comedy. Not fun enough to be good. Plot was pathetic. Very linear. It was basically rubbish. Although on the plus side is was longer then other rubbish ones.

I will admit, this made me laugh quite a few times. However, the linearity, the obviously rushed ending, and the sometimes confusing perspective changes detracted from it being as good of entertainment as it could've been. Still, it was a good bit of humor.

really stupid