Forgotten Rose

First thing's first: if you like foreplay, you won't be getting any of that here. The "winning" romance ending goes from "Oh, you notice you find them attractive" to getting engaged in two paragraphs.

The single sentence synopsis says this is a story about a new love. Is it really, though? It isn't until the final two paragraphs of the story (which, by the way, is the exact same coffee ending for basically every branch that you don't go home in) that any hint of romance happens. There is no development of the relationship, no conflict between the protagonist and their love to solve, no drama related to love at all.

Instead, what this storygame really is about is a tired protagonist who has the opportunity to do some good deeds when witnessing strangers experience some sort of problem—be it apparently forgetting flowers, or being mugged. If you decide to go home and ignore it, you will get the same key-fumbling ending in which the protagonist wonders if s/he will meet someone new tomorrow. If you help the hapless strangers, you'll reach a fork in which you can get the aforementioned key-fumbling ending, or the exact same coffee ending.

The ending itself is a little problematic since the protagonist doesn't notice the other person is attractive until AFTER agreeing to a coffee date with them. Usually, you notice their attractiveness first.

There is one particular path where you can reject someone and then still end up with someone at the very same coffee joint, having the very same coffee ending.

Unfortunately, the images in this storygame are lost to the winds of time. They seem to all be broken. I wonder what they might have been....

But for a storygame written 15 years ago, I think being 778th overall is quite the achievement.

It seems we skipped some important details here xD This game was written well, but there wasn't much depth to the actual story to say the least. I would've liked to see the relationship actually progress before seeing words like marriage and such :l

This story was decent for what it was, I suppose. Things just ended rather abrubtly, and more details about the love interest would've been much appreciated. The writing wasn't bad by any means, it just feels like quite a bit more could have been added to make this feel like more of a complete story.

Hmm... Where should I begin with this?

I don't normally play this storygames, but the name "Forgotten Rose" intrigued me enough, so I decided to head over and see what this is.

First of all, you can immediately tell the future of the storygame with your writing. With choices like "Do you go for coffee, or leave" or "Do you wait for them, or leave" You know exactly which one leads to true love, and which one doesn't. Also, the story was very short and therfore abrupt. One minute I'm having friendly coffee with someone, and then the next, I'm engaged, married, and living a good/better life.

The writing was okay-ish, with no grammar mistakes as far as I could see. However still, (and this is a common problem) there isn't much descriptivity. And I mean at all. The writing is bland enough, you don't describe anything. The reader doesn't know what the character is thinking, how the girl looks like, whether she has blue eyes or not, what the character thinks about traffic, what the assaliant looks like, whether the assaliant is a one-eyed lizard with pork chops for teeth...etc. I feel as though you could've added onto your writing and and made it more vivid, as to paint an image in the reader's mind. Try using descriptive tongue next time.

This last point is kind of short, but still important, and its the use of cliche things in this story. For example, let's look at your title, "Forgotten Rose". As far as I know, this story never mentions a character named "Rose"... or any characters at all. How is Rose forgetful? What does that even mean? It has no correlation to this story whatsoever, really. It just seems like a cliche, steamy romance-y Valentine's title.

So, with a short story, a title that is cliche and makes no sense, bland writing, I give this a 4/8. Keep trying, and please use descriptive writing.

Interesting... It just needs much more details.

spelling problems left and right

So you're teling me this game skips EVERYTHING and
you immediately in litteraly the same page where you agreed to go on a date with a guy you met 20 minutes ago

Pretty goood!

bleh

I thought this was a cute and fun simple game. I just found this website recently & I think I might try writing some of my own - thank you for the inspo! :)

I would have liked it to be longer but I still enjoyed it.