Player Comments on Hallway

I just found this game from looking at Sentinel's points and boy is it awful. It's not even a CYOA. See, the main thing about CYOAs is that they have CHOICES. This is just an endless loop. Even some meaningless choices would let it qualify as a CYOA, but you didn't even include THAT!

Supposedly there's a secret ending if you keep walking, but I'm not even going to bother. The writing was crappy. You painted absolutely no image of the hallway. At first I thought it was some long, eggshell colored hallway with no decorations but then you mentioned wallpaper. You need to set a tone that matches with your description! The tone you set was robotic and sterilized, NOT ruined and dark.

I can see why people didn't like your stories now! These are awful! You probably still think your shitty 'Telltale Manor' or whatever story was great, too. That one was posted on ROBLOX though.

You're just shitty.

Well, I am glad that I did't fall for the trick ending!



-SPOILERS-
Running is after than walking.

I meant no choices it autocorrected

There were no chicks in this?

Hah, this is the second story that I've read recently on here that was inspired by a story that I wrote. It is humbling to read a story inspired by one of my own. I liked the (true) ending. I also agree with the other reviewer that this reminds me of The Enigma of Amigara Fault.

Well... this was pretty shit. There were no choices, other than "Just stop playing" or "Keep walking until paramedics reach you". It was just a boring and repetitive game, and the fact that you made it to be repetitive doesn't make it any better, it makes me question why the fuck you made it.

Who the fuck packs extra apples?

Actually, Mizal, it is a CYOA. There's more than one ending. I got the good one (where the paramedics rescue you) ... this game is designed to look like you're not able to get a good ending unless you're very stubborn.

Click the button or die throughout the entire story.

Come for the engima, stay for the faults.

you guys know there's a good ending to this

right?

I've read something like this before. It's like a never-ending cycle. The thought provocation is there, but it's quite hard to master it. Even harder for a CYOA. But since it doesn't meet the standards of a CYOA, (AKA: Barely any choices for different routes.) the story won't stay up for long, which is kind of a shame.

Nothing wrong with the writing, but this will get poor ratings and probably be removed because it's not a CYOA.