Player Comments on In School Suspension

Hey, this was actually pretty funny. I must tip my hat off to you in making such a humorous storygame that can be described as 'random' but that wasn't much of a issue as the story was written very well and the presentation was rather solid.

Grammar and punctuation wise, this story did quite well on that front as well. I also enjoyed the premise of being a degenerate of sorts, it was able to provide many scenes that offered plenty of laughs to be had.

My only complaint is that some of the choices didn't really matter, as the story would progress the same regardless of the choice that was chosen, this was also a bit short length wise too. I wouldn't of minded having a longer storygame to read through, because it certainly would've been fun to experience more.

As the storygame is now, it's only rather decent. Obviously in a technical sense, this shines, but this storygame almost lacks too much to truly make it satisfying in the end.

Choices are rather important, and I felt like I was reading a very funny storygame rather than playing one, if that makes any sense.

Still, this was funny and it made me laugh. So thanks for the rather fascinating read.

6/8
This story was actually funny as hell.

This is probably one of the best random stories I've ever read, was really funny.

Pretty good. Honestly though I only gave it the rating I did because it wasn't total shit.

This storygame was really enjoyable. It was funny and pretty well written, but left me wanting more.

The story was well done and I felt the characters were very relatable. I enjoyed the humorous scenarios that occurred during the course of the story and was quite interested to try all available paths.

However, some of the choices either did not matter, or looped you back into the main narrative. While they provided a slightly different perspective, it did not feel like those choices made any difference to the outcome.

I really enjoyed the way the story was written, and wish that there was much more to it. The in school suspension did not last long enough.

Overall, this storygame was fun and enjoyable, but way too short.

What a fun game!

Okay, but too short.

A fine story indeed. Didn't make it too far, got booted out for attempting to do homework, but I enjoyed my time nonetheless.

I enjoyed the execution of the premise and the main character the most.

Kinda vague but like the "You get killed by a spinning pen" part (=

Yeah as if I even care but it was pretty amazing

Short, snappy, and witty. Definitely worth every cent.

Really funny, it made my day.

Great game!

I actually kinda liked it :)

It is okay lacks choices

My god, this was an entertaining piece of writing! Some of the scenes actualy got me to grin like a idiot. Not to metion, your grammar was very good, there were no grammar mistakes I found whatsoever.

The only "mistake" - if you could call it that - would be that it was too short, it was entertaining, but it was all too short.

Ehh not too food

this story is so bs i wasted my time on this do not read

this story stinks worse than cow shit and donkey ass boiled in a farmers ass crack in July

Awesome LOL

Cool, cool. But I died by a pen

Thanks narrator for giving me a choice and totally making me do what I intended not to do ;) jk i thought it was funny how you stood up for grammar:D

Accurate.

The ending was very assuming.

Not bad, linear yes, but not bad.

It was okay. However, it was rather short not to mention a little linear. I really wanted to have more of an escape scene instead of simply escaping and being free. Some more choices would've been great.

umm...this is supposed 2 be a choose your own story game .. y is the author givin all the choices!?

:-*

Rude

This game was okay. However, it could be a bit longer. Other than that, this is a relatively good game on this site. Also, it wouldn't hurt to make more games.

Fucking hilarious.

"I'll keep you warm, Lauren" *incoherent slurping noises*

6/8

it was too short, with too much inappropriate content.

Haha, this was cool. I know how to twirl baton, so yeah, I often twirl pens too often between my fingers, so that's something I would totally do. XD

Nice.

Changed my rating to an eight.

Funny and well written, although short.

That was...surprisingly accurate.

Hahaha! This is brilliant!

This story... was brilliant. The grammar and punctuation are perfect, the writing style was hilarious, and the ending I got (*SPOILER ALERT* Where the 2 kids beat each other up and the teacher leaves to call the cops *END OF SPOILER*) was absolutely hilarious (I fucking love Shawshank Redemption). My only problem: It was a bit to short for my tastes. Anyway, this is a good start, and you're on your way to greatness. 6/8.

I enjoyed the writing, humor, references, and plot in this storygame, which all are sometimes hard to casually implement, like you have. I wish it was longer, and the plot could be a little more stretched, but all in all it was a fun way to waste some time.

Hope you guys enjoy this. It's my first storygame and just me practicing with the editor. If readers are amused, I'll do a real, in depth game later on.