Player Comments on Rebel Jedi

Decent story game, although it would be great to have some sort of background instead of "Jedi steals speeder and fights his way into a temple" (I assume this is the ending we were supposed to get)

It's short. Too short. You need to give the reader time to immerse himself into the story, you can't just end it the second readers start to get interested.

Also, I don't get it, how is he a rebel Jedi? It seems as if he's just a plain, normal Jedi.

What fight was he coming back from? (You said he lost his light saber, but offered no explanation as to the year, very little on location, and if the Jedi had just come back from a war, were was the war, why did it happen? Ect ect...)
There are too many holes in the story to rate it any higher than a 4/8.
Normally I'd be mor critical of this story but there is a lot of praise for the next two episodes in the series, so I'll wait until I finish those 2 before judging you too harshly

I am disturbed that this has managed to keep a rating above 3.

Why is this so short???

There's only one right path, and if you take the others you die. Not much variety here.

good

Good start.

Epic... Amazing I might add! But, could use improvement. Keep up the good work! :)

That was good

its short and shit

interesting take

"As far as you are concerned, you are the last of the Jedi Order."

But you're probably not. And every wrong link leads to death, forcing you along one set path to a purely unsatisfactory ending of a single paragraph, with no closure and no explanation to anything that's happened.

Decent, but way too short.

6/10

Too short

Nice but short

This sucks

Led you on only one story line. You couldn't choose anything else except for what it 'wanted' you to choose or you either died or it sent you back to where you started.

This didn't make any sense.

Like what everyone else is saying, it's a really short and the fact that it's so linear makes it kinda boring. Its a good start though!

Um...better luck next time

This game was kind of short and boring but I loved the action and the use of the force. I love Star Wars. 4/8

Good. . . for you to poop on

Way short plus if you make the wrong choice you die Every time!

I didn't like it much. It was more of a ''Final Destination meets Star Wars". More realistic outcomes and this will be better.

Potential

It was bad... just bad...

Game was to short and almost every other chose resulted in death. Please make the story a bit more flexible.

Please please make this longer.

Good for a first.

Longer and with more options, please.

Not bad, just pretty short. Would've probably made more sense to make this into one long game instead of a series of short ones, but like I said, not bad. ^_^

confusing ending. doesn't quite lead up to the second. but still a good story game

Too bad its so short

It was ok, but I hate choices like do you go right or left. I know there is one in my game, but I made it so that you can not die if you choose the wrong choice. If you want an example look at my game island attack two.

it's ok

It was short, but good for a first game.
And, technically, blasters shoot lasers, not bullets :P

okay.

It's alrightttt, good first game though, needs longer plot.

not baggin mate

I thought it was good especially for a first game. You might want to add more details- it would really add to the story. It felt really short, but I know you have sequels to it.

to short

Like the others say, it's a good start but it could benefit from more detail. The description gives a short summary but I didn't have a feel for who I was or what I was doing.

pretty good I'm a starwars freak so I gave it a good comment

This game was very short and you can't really avoid dying.

cool

Too short and not enough description.

My main complaint here is the lack of detail; the StarWars universe is too big to be reduced to "there is a speeder outside a restaurant". (I think there was a statement similar to that in the story.)

Not too bad. Reasonably good writing with some good action. Try removing the "Jump right, jump left" arbitrary decisions. Also, expand a bit on the background.

Too short and linear, and you space after periods.

I meant "reading this" lol!

Well, I made it alive. So I guess I won. It was pretty good though, I someone who clearly doesn't mind basic editor games or linerity. Just give me a good game, with a nice story. I had fun riding this and using the jedi mind trick on the stormtroopers. I'll play the other two and see how they fair.

It was too linear and the reason for dying was kind of dumb. Good for a first, though.

Great job for a first game! It was really hard, and you could've spent a bit more time on it, and maybe added pictures, but you get a 5/8 from me. Off to play the 2nd one!

Interesting, but short.

Good story, but needs to be finished.
And it seemed that at every page a single link lead to death and the other did. It got repedative

you need to work on not being linear, and description.

Meh ok, you shoulda finished it.

Could you make it less linear? Linear means it goes in a line. Mabey you could have the door 1 close on you and you have to find a certain path to leave and somehow appear in room 2. Other than that, I felt like I was in the game myself.

Just a suggestion - Make it longer!

This is just a suggestion, but I think your game was fairly lengthy.

Not bad. You could be a bit more in-depth in your writing, though.

im messin
i LOVE it

Hey! Not bad for a first game! You can change the title of your First Page, you know. I don't think this was an AE game, but if you read more about AE, you will learn a lot to make a very good game for it. Good job for a first game!