Succubus in Hiding

For what was completed, the writing isn't terrible, but in addition to being a lot less finished than some of the other storygames thrown into the mix at the last second to avoid shame, there were also way too many "choose A and live, choose B and die" situations, which really isn't my cup of tea (and my experience is that almost no one likes those sort of set ups). It's especially a bad idea to start the story right off the bat with such a choice.

Still, I think there is room to make it decent, and after you unpublish and redo some it, I think it will rise in the rankings of this contest.

It wasn't bad for what you wrote but it isn't finished. There are options that I would really like to see through. But I really love the idea of the fighting yourself and this has a lot of potential. So I encourage you to finish creating the story and keep up the good work