The Free Hand
, #2 for
Played 20,758 times (finished 554)
"March in the swamp"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably be between PG-13 and R.
The Free Hand
A work of Fiction by Ashen_Snake.
I liked the general atmosphere and puzzles that required thought but weren't impossible. I have many complaints though.
1. How did he even get there? We have no idea what happened to this guy to end up in some abandoned hospital. Although you might say that his dead daughter, the final boss girl, brought him there, why not kill him in the first place?
2. We have no explanations of the monsters/creatures/visions of gore, or even of Richard and Allie. Sorry, but "We never did find Mom, you know" isn't going to cut it. I might be missing out on something, but I wouldn't be surprised, as the backstory - which is meant to serve as some huge plot twist once we end the game, by the way - is incredibly vague, and it feels like it's only added to provide layering to constant fighting, and in general it doesn't have work. At least have a page at the end explaining it all.
3. We're supposed to believe that dog-human creatures, ripped apart dead bodies hanging from the ceiling, and some strange pulsing flesh ball is just lying around in some condemned building which literally lies next to a "normal street with normal people are doing normal things."
4. No depth, all gore and 'plot.' Why not expand your characters a little, show the teamwork more, or at least give us a chance to visualize Richard and Allie other than saying that Richards skin is pale or that his lips are blue while dying or that Allies knuckles are white and her fingers dirty when grabbing Nathaniels hand? It reminded me of some paranormal Hellraiser, except Hellraiser is much better made.
I'm sorry, but I don't understand how the game has made the top 50.
However, this is a mystery/puzzle game, and it is filled with puzzles and the game is one giant mystery!
I just really hope Ashen_Snake doesn't write romance.
on 4/6/2018 5:15:47 AM with a score of 0
Great story with nicely-detailed imagery which sets the scene and is improved even further with the choice of images included in the story.
One thing I think you could improve on though, is building up your characters - especially the main character. Perhaps you could have added a notebook in which the reader could have read the thoughts of a particular character?
However overall, very nicely-done story which has enough of a challenge to keep the reader thinking, but not too difficult so as to be impossible to complete. Good job Ashen-Snake :)
on 8/26/2014 12:50:25 AM with a score of 0
If you're thirteen years old, then you are the most precocious writer I've ever seen. Regardless, not only is this one of the best written stories on the site, it is one of the best stories, and combines the intense descriptions disturbing photos. Excellent everything! This is going in my list.
on 9/12/2006 8:56:04 PM with a score of 0
I like it, somehow it is really engaging. It made me want to replay it again!
on 1/24/2022 1:54:44 PM with a score of 0
I won't say much right now because I only read through one path but from what I read I thought it was pretty good. There weren't too many grammar issues that I could find and the plot was decent, but from what I read not all of my questions got answered. It does have a little bit of a backstory to it, which is good, but from what I read it felt like the backstory was mostly an afterthought and it didn't make me feel much for the character. The concept was really good though, and although it could have been executed better it was still written decently. You used a lot of gore and horrific elements to take place of what could have been more story, but you did have some story, so I have to give it to you for that. Maybe just a little more backstory wrapped into the different challenges so that you found out more in each segment until you had the full story, maybe even with a little twist, at the end. Overall this was really good though!
on 11/23/2021 7:55:58 PM with a score of 0
— Acid on 11/12/2020 2:36:06 AM with a score of 0
on 5/28/2019 1:01:18 AM with a score of 0
This freaked me out.
I didn't even want to walk down my hallway (no lights on) without lights- I felt like I was going to step on the bulb. I got a Okay Ending, and this game was awesome. Nice piece of backstory, there, too.
on 3/20/2019 9:02:33 PM with a score of 0
Beautiful story. Good use of items. I LOVE THE WORK. YOU ARE DOING AWESOME. DON'T STOP!!!!!!!!!! :D
— Bored101 on 12/5/2018 2:37:14 AM with a score of 0
There is not much difference between the 'best' ending and the 'okay' ending, other than you see some talking from the people you saved. The best and okay endings aren't really good because you are a crazy man who killed someone he shouldn't have.
It is a nicely detailed game though - if you take away the fact that you're crazy, it's an awesome game. There is detail, there is the horror element, there are monsters.
The first battle, though, is not much of a battle - for one, it's sort of optional if you don't want the best ending. The already half-dead monster doesn't even put up a fight.
With more monsters, you could make a really good horror book; with the way it was written, it was already creepy.
A fun puzzle-like horror, this game was very interesting, not boring.
on 1/26/2018 10:25:41 PM with a score of 0
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