The End of Creation

This warning wasn't needed in my review of the other game, but despite my best efforts THIS REVIEW WILL EVENTUALLY HAVE SPOILERS, so you'd best bugger off if you haven't read the game yet. Really, if you haven't read the game, what the fuck are you doing?

I think in many ways this might be a perfect sequel. Basem, as a worldly and travelled character, provides for this world the thing that the kind of hintful darkness of the first game left me thirsting for-- Not necessarily answers, but context, details, a wider picture, and even more things to wonder at than when I started. The best worldbuilding is the kind that is never just fulfilling requirements or coloring in blank space-- The truth is always more nuanced and complicated than the assumption, and everything revealed reflects that.

When the reader first meets Julian, we're only given hints of the depths of a very rigid and dogmatic education, the edifice of which is revealed only in glimpses as Julian applies it to his surroundings. As Basem's world is colored in from numerous gray areas and direct experience with all corners of the world, so much more information is relevant to the present tense of the story and comes forth with just enough elaborateness to be satisfying. Basem is definitely one of the more fleshed out and idiosyncratic protagonists I've seen in a CYOA on this site, revealing much about the world through his thoughts and opinions-- And that's absolutely to the story's benefit. It's a relatively common practice to leave a lot up about the protagonist in storygames the air, up to projection, and that's fine and dandy when done well. But, this is the first game that really feels like I'm *exactly* the character I'm supposed to be. Like, this story puts you in *the* front seat for the conflict of the story as it develops. There's no person here who would have a more interesting perspective, and more agency in his decisions going forward, than Basem.

That's not to say anyone else in the story wouldn't have an interesting perspective, quite to the contrary. As is a recurring Malk motif, everybody with a speaking role, even if you rarely see them for more than one scene, even one or two that don't have a line of dialogue, have something about them that's memorable. Pasha Mehmet felt like a transient, incidental presence, and yet what details he has remind me of one of my coworkers and it feels wrong calling him a minor character. I think it says something that I can specifically recall his name even 2 obese paragraphs into writing this review.

I've probably said this before about Malk's style, but it always feels like you're passing by numerous other, intersecting stories on your way through each path, but it just makes sense that you're the protagonist of this one in particular. Basem feels like the only perspective character that makes sense for this game, and that's a feeling I don't know how to describe other than that, despite it being a factor that technically applies to most other games. Like yeah, if you work out the narrative calculus, *most* second-person storygames would only make sense from the perspective of the PoV character, but Basem just feels like the *only* way to experience this game. The same events in anyone else's shoes would leave too many things missing, like an allium flower without the onion.

The End of Creation is also an excellent evolution on the themes and tone of the first game. Despite having a comparable wordcount, and both games being easily devoured in a blink for readers possessed by the right hyperfixation, it somehow makes Prayer for Destruction feel small. An aperitif sweetened by humor for the next course, where shit starts really hitting the fan. It's never completely without the dry humor of the first game, but it's used much differently here. The tone is definitely dramatic once things begin to evolve and the story begins to let you in on the plot of, well, *the universe*. Basem's pithy, pragmatic, and worldly point of view makes the whole unfolding of events feel almost like the Conan/Lovecraft-Mythos Crossover that Robert E Howard would sometimes tease at but never brought to bear. Basem might not literally be grappling with the things from Yuggoth, but he and the reader are certainly confronted with one of the oldest examples of Cosmic Horror: The Gnostic theory of God! And yet it doesn't boil a single thing down.

If I had to say these games so far had a single weakness, it's that I can definitely pick some major paths out as my favorites from the others, and one of the endings of PfD is almost definitely canon in TEoC. But just because the hilarious Massacre of Edelrach *probably* isn't how Julian came to these realizations, I certainly understand the choice-- This twist is by far the more interesting one for this game. If this ever happens to become a trilogy, though, I know which ending I'm rooting for.

The abundance of historical and religious references to this story is so great-albeit with a fantastical twist-that it merits being labeled as historical too. For future readers, consider the advice of reading the prequel, as its "true" route serves as a prelude to the events in "The End of Creation".

The core theme here, as well as in the prequel, was religion. While it's easy to dismiss the verses at the very start of each of the stories, if analyzed, one would understand their importance. If the verses on "A Prayer for Destruction" are biblical verses, "pure" Christian or what is considered mainstream Christianity to symbolize Julian's (the protagonist in the prequel) religious fanaticism, the verses with which "The End of Creation" starts with, are verses from the Gospel of John. These verses are part of the non-mainstream theology, gnosticism, symbolizing Julian's change, in both personality and way of thinking.

So as to clarify my point from the above paragraph, the verses serve two purposes:
1. To signal Julian's transformation in both character and religious approach. I will touch more on this later in the review.
2. To explore the historical theological conflict between Christianity and Gnosticism.
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So, in stark contrast to the prequel, we encounter an open-minded protagonist who has travelled much around the world as a pirate and has the same indifference towards religion as the modern human today. If Julian represents one side of the coin, Basem represents the other.

News has arrived that our dear old faceless knight, Julian has declared war on the Royal Family, so Basem is sent to scout the area and act as the Sultan's representative in the North. Now I'll deviate a bit here and just advise readers to go through Julian's route as that appears to be the only true route in this story. There is less branching routes than there were in "A Prayer for Destruction" and they are less developed.

a. Historical References
As stated above, there are numerous historical references, but so as not to ramble on and on about them, deviating from the purpose of this review, only the relevant ones are mentioned below.

1. If the North (where Julian resides) worships martyrs, saints and the Necessary one (well there are pagans, but we won't mention them here), reminding the reader of Christian Europe, the Sultanate of Hasanat, as indicated by the name, are also monotheists whose manner of worship is eerily similar to the islamic one. It clearly draws inspiration from the medieval “oriental” part of the world, as can be seen from the existence of slave warriors (Skadras) similar to the Mamluks or Ghulams (Great Seljuk Sultanate), the throne room decorations being the holy titles and verses from their book and the pompous manner in which the sultans are addressed as. What both the North and Sultanate of Hasanate have in common is the usage of the concept “divine right to rule as God’s representatives on Earth”.

2. Eunuchs. There is not much explanation needed here as most people know about them. Considering how they often appear in political intrigue ploys to enthrone or dethrone princes, kings and emperors in Chinese history, or how they were historically used in Muslim royal courts.

3.As the Northern religion allowed the worship of saints and martyrs alongside the Necessary One, churches and monasteries gave the faceless knights the names of these saints, such as Julian and Constantine the martyr from a Prayer for Destruction. Julian’s name might have been derived from Saint Julian of Le Mans, a key figure in the spreading of Christianity in Le Mans. While in the “End of Creation”, his name might be linked to emperor Julian the Apostate, considering his rejection of the church’s theology (basically if you reject the mainstream theology = apostate by the church).

4. The “trident of skirmishing”: raping, thieving and burning of barns, as Eriksson so delicately puts it, was a real tactic used in two cases: during raids on the enemy supply line/camp or raids on villages in the surrounding area of the besieged castle to resupply and use scorched earth tactics to strike fear in the enemy’s heart and to leave them with no choice, but to surrender or die due to starvation.
The faceless knight Sybil. This name derives from the pagan title of women who were believed to have prophetic powers. Early Christian authors, such as Lactantius and Augustine, included references to the Sibylline prophecies in their works.

5. During early Christianity, Gnosticism arose as an opposing school of thought. Therefore there was a fierce theological debate between what was considered mainstream Christianity and Gnostics from the 1st century AD to 3rd century AD. Gnosticism was supressed successfully by the church and branded as heretic, which could explain the “automatic death sentence” for anyone consulting elves or the allowed extermination of elven race by the church in northern lands (A Prayer for Destruction).
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Now, remember when I said: Basem and Julian are two sides of the same coin? Well, there is an intriguing element about Basem, namely the voice which almost guides his actions and saves his life by giving words of warning: inside his head. Using the metaphor/idiom "two sides of the same coin" or even the duality concept in gnosticism, Julian appears to be the champion of the True God while Basem the champion of Demiurg (if going against Julian). Now let’s discuss the points made priorly.

1. To signal Julian's transformation in both character and religious approach. I will touch more on this later in the review.

Julian was a Christian religious fanatic in the prequel, who considered himself God’s judicial sword, reminding me of inquisitors or crusader knights (well the ones who went crusading for “the sake of God”, not the common thieves and pillagers). In spite of being depicted as having the common disease of fanaticism, the signs were there: He studied his religion before, but unfortunately didn’t use his rationality.

His practical side showed when he worked together with Lelit to defeat the demon “Laughing Goat” and then didn’t kill her, which kind of makes me wonder what the hell happened to his oath. But it’s clear that the trigger to his “conversion”, was the vision he saw during their battle, since he went to Cadras-Under-the-Shadow to study knowledge falling under the heretical category + he considers the elf’s advice (remember the death sentence part?).

What I mean, is that Julian has changed in his approach to religion. He seeks knowledge, even those considered heretic or barbarian, just as gnostic teachings commend: seeking salvation through esoteric knowledge. The elitist nature of this school of thought, might explain the transmission of the blood memory through the wine of truth.
He has also changed in character: from an arrogant, self-righteous prick who considered anyone beside his race and brothers-in-faith as worse than shit, he has mellowed out and treats his brothers-in-arms alongside his guests.

But one thing has not changed in him, the fanatic disease. He just changed its direction from his religion to another, especially after discovering "the truth" over Demiurg, the world and the Almighty. Similarly to how the converts or reverts nowadays appear to be more religious and sometimes turn to fanatics in protecting or spreading the "truth" they have discovered.

2. To explore the historical theological conflict between Christianity and Gnosticism

During the transition period between paganism and christianity, for the "western world" aka Europe, there was a significant amount of pagan references used to explain and make Christianity more digestible theologically for the population. This led to the birth of a number of schools of thoughts and sects which would be considered outright pagan and heretical by the mainstream christian theologians. One of them was gnosticism, in whose teachings, the vision Basem sees, alongside Julian and every single person who drinks the wine of truth, find direct references to: Lesser Flawed God Demiurg + the Almighty transcendent God (elements of polytheism), the concept of the physical world being a lesser shadow of the shadow of the true world. This and more. If you are interested on them, just google search them.

For around 2 centuries these knowledge was violently rejected until it faded completely in the background around 3rd century AD, as Julian states to the knowledge Basem and he had gained as: "the knowledge of the ancients which the church tried to eradicate completely".
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a. The writing was better and more... simplistic and interesting for the average reader to enjoy and read through, since they can relate to the main protagonist, Basem, but subjectively speaking, I liked the prequel and Julian more.
b. As a history and philosophy junkie, I loved the references used here, as can be seen by the review itself.
c. Skadras is a scumbag who deserved to be hanged by modern standards, but he is a loyal slave, so to quote Reddington from the Blacklist: "Value Loyalty Above All Else".
d. That cunning celibate scholar was an interesting and amusing character. It was clear he was lying about something early on, during the interrogation, so the minor plot twist of him being Julian's agent rather than ally was a welcoming surprise.
e. I did not care about any other side characters introduced besides the ones mentioned. Probably due to their small role in the events.
f. Proofreading was done well, but there are still instances of misspellings here and there.
g. There were many theories I had about the towers based on the material they were made, namely the black stone. The material might be a reference the black basalt which has been used for centuries for fortifications or aesthetic purposes or the black stone in Mecca. Or the towers are directly referencing the ziggurats or temples. On the other hand, they might just be the fictional creation of the author.
h. The politics and battle formations were entertaining. The author has a gift of writing battle scenes.
i. Absolutely loved how the story comes full circle from the prequel's true route to the sequel.
j. The main criticism is the lack of development for the other routes, compared to "A Prayer for Destruction".

Anyway, this review has gone for too long already and might bore some due to its length, so I'll finish it here with the overall rating I gave it: 7/8.

Review 12: The End Of Creation
This will be more of a companion review and sequel to the one I’ve written about A prayer for destruction. So I’ll be comparing them a lot with each other.

In a lot of ways I like the story a lot more than the prequel. The worldbuilding was conveyed a lot neater and was woven more seamlessly into the narrative. Despite the story description urging the reader to first read the prequel, I think that you could also start by reading this story and if you want more clarification you can then read the prequel. So far the story is pretty easy to follow even if you haven’t read a prayer for destruction.

I also like the side characters in the End of Creation a lot more. There is also a lot more variation and flavors of them and many of them are very memorable. John, the scholar, who longs to touch a woman; Skadras, a simple man with simple desires and is able to fight pretty well; the bloodthirsty captain Zweihander, the changed man and leader of the rebels Julian. Although they don’t develop as much as characters, I find them a lot more endearing than the few characters shown in the prayer for destruction. The biggest reason is, is that the end of creation also leaves room for more lighthearted banter between the characters, something we didn’t get in the prequel.

On that note, I do think that Basem is less of an interesting protagonist as Julian. Julian in the first story has a very clear inner conflict besides the literal conflict within the city. His inner conflict is his own newfound understanding of the world and in particular elves vs his previous religious beliefs. At the end of the main route, his choice whether or not to break the rule his religion enforced upon them cements the end of his character development (and his change in the kind of person he becomes). With Basem you have that way less since he is much more a pragmatic and calm guy all things considering.

One bonus you do get with reading the prequel first is also wondering whether the faceless knight who is leading the rebels is really the knight you played as in the Prayer for Destruction since they are so different in demeanor and personality. It is quite a nice touch that we do know for sure it is indeed him when he calls his horse ‘dirt’ in one of the last pages.

Notes
- Already, this story starts off way stronger than the first installment. It has about as much exposition as the first one, but it is delivered in a much more natural way. The way The end of Creation does it, is to also insert the beliefs and actions of the protagonist Basem into every piece of information about the world. Like when he talks about that he has traveled a lot, it is natural for him to describe the lands he has seen; indirectly also a great way to show a tidbit of the worldbuilding. The sultan summoning him causes him great concern, because he knows about the instability of the north and briefly elaborates on it. The climate of the region is also described a lot more clearly; dates, salt, coffee; it is a lot warmer area.
- Also fun easter egg with this line Men live in fear of gargantuan knights who take the heads of heretics
- I find the Velene scene a bit boring and not adding a lot to the story. He also doesn’t become relevant in the story again.
- Heretic knight and his elf consort. Is this the protagonist of the prayer for destruction? Hahah.
- THE JULIAN ROUTE
- I like the banter Basem has with Skadras. It also makes him a direct foil of the protagonist in the first story, who is a lot more outwardly nastier towards people he thinks of lesser than him.
- John the Sage is also a nice foil to Skadras, being the smarter ones of Basem’s men, but a lot weaker in strength. There is also very wholesome banter about John not having a lot of experience with women and Skadras commenting on it.
- Oh man, Julian, the protagonist of the first story did a whole face heel turn between a prayer for destruction and the end of creation, discovering that the Necessary One is a false God and not the true god of creation.
- The way that Julian chilled down a ton compared to his first appearance is almost like night and day. He even treats the men beneath him a lot better. He’s a lot more likeable now.
- I find it very amusing how quickly the Basem recovers from this revelation though I have to admit that Basem isn’t the most pious kind of person seeing that he tolerates his buddy Skadras more pagan habits.
- THE ELF ROUTE
- I like the interconnectedness of the two routes. The rebels shout for example things like “The father of Beginnings”, “fear not the agents of Demiurg”. Terms that are properly explained in the Julian route.
- And again, Basem would have been killed if he faced Julian in a one to one fight. That the faceless knights could only be felled by canons is a clever idea.
- I think this route is a lot weaker than the Julian route, but the idea of him becoming the same mindless slaughterer of men like Julian was when he slayed the elf is interesting. In retrospect it does make the other route hit harder this way, just knowing what kind of person Basem will become were it not for Julian’s influence.

It's alright, I think you have an excellent concept here, but the story is far too short. the storygame was written perfectly, please GIVE ME MORE!

***DISCLAIMER*** to the author, It should first be stated, that you should NOT take anything i say with a grain of salt. Everything i say i mean, and i mean it with my chest puffed out, so, take everything i say to heart. To the readers, this review will contain lots of spoilers, so I suggest you read the storygame first.

The End of Creation opens with a quote that immediately sets the philosophical tone of the narrative:

"Light and Darkness, life and death, right and left, are brothers of one another. They are inseparable. Because of this neither are the good good, nor evil evil, nor is life life, nor death death. For this reason, each one will dissolve into its earliest origin. But those who are exalted above the world are indissoluble, eternal."

This profound statement introduces the central theme of duality and interconnectedness, challenging the reader to reconsider the very nature of good and evil, life and death. The idea that all things dissolve back into their origins, except for those exalted above the world, foreshadows the book’s exploration of transcendence and the eternal. This is not just a thematic cornerstone; it’s subtly mirrored in the protagonist’s journey as he grapples with his own disillusionment and the relativism of beliefs formed through his travels.

From the second page, the book excels at worldbuilding. The author skillfully avoids the trap of heavy-handed exposition, instead immersing us in the protagonist’s disillusionment and the complex cultural tapestries of the world. We learn much about the universe and the protagonist’s past without it ever feeling forced or out of place.

Characterization and Atmosphere:

The characters in The End of Creation are intricate and multifaceted. For example, Skadras, described as both a formidable warrior and an awkward servant, presents a fascinating duality. Velene, on the other hand, is obsequious yet cunning. These characters are not just plot devices; they are deeply integrated into the fabric of the world, each with their own unique voices and motivations.

The author’s descriptive prowess is evident, particularly in the atmospheric depiction of settings. The Sultan’s palace, with its marble throne, stained glass skylight, and the shadows of God’s names cast on the floor, is rendered in vivid detail, immersing the reader fully in this richly imagined world. This attention to sensory detail extends beyond visuals, engaging all the senses and pulling the reader into the experience.

The Uniqueness of Civilizations
One of the most remarkable aspects of The End of Creation is how distinct and vividly realized each civilization and its people feel. The different cultures the protagonist encounters are not merely variations on a theme; they are fully fleshed-out societies with their own customs, beliefs, and ways of life. Whether it’s the strict, honor-bound traditions of one group or sodomy and debauchery loving of another, each civilization/faction feels authentic and deeply rooted in its own history and worldview. The rituals, languages, and social norms vary dramatically from one culture to the next, giving each encounter a fresh and immersive quality. This diversity in customs and cultures adds a rich layer of authenticity to the world, making it feel like a living, breathing place where different peoples have developed their own distinct identities over time.

Intrigue, Pacing, and the Role of Julian:

Political intrigue is woven deftly into the narrative, with espionage and power dynamics adding layers of tension. Dialogue feels natural, revealing character traits and advancing the plot without ever feeling contrived. The pacing is generally smooth, balancing action, dialogue, and description to maintain interest, though some readers might find the dense worldbuilding occasionally overwhelming.

Julian emerges as one of the standout characters, bringing a charismatic and almost sage-like presence to the story. He often outshines even the protagonist in their interactions, offering wisdom and insight that ground the more fantastical elements of the plot. His role is crucial in both the philosophical underpinnings and the emotional depth of the narrative.

The Villainy of Demiurg:

Demiurg, as the primary antagonist, is portrayed as an "evil for evil's sake" villain, a fitting archetype given the story’s setting. His role as a demon masquerading as a god adds a layer of existential dread to the narrative, raising the stakes beyond mere physical conflict. The "blood dreams" further enhance the perception of Demiurg as a corrupt and defiled being, making the struggle against him not just a battle for survival but a fight against cosmic malevolence.

Critique of Narrative Agency and Ending:

One of the major critiques of The End of Creation lies in its narrative structure. While the story is beautifully crafted, it is essentially linear, with little room for true decision-making or branching paths. This lack of agency can make the reader feel as though their choices have minimal impact on the outcome, detracting from the immersive experience. For instance, the automatic death route if you attempt to fight Julian after speaking with John the Sage feels restrictive and undermines the sense of interactivity that could have been more engaging. Instead, it would be more engaging if there was some way we could win that fight and get an alternative epilogue.

The ending, while not abrupt, leaves much to be desired in terms of closure. The narrative stops at a point that feels acceptable, but the absence of a resolution to the larger conflict with Demiurg leaves a lingering sense of incompletion. If this is a setup for a sequel, it would be understandable, but as a standalone story, it misses the mark of delivering a fully satisfying conclusion.

Conclusion:

Overall, The End of Creation is a masterfully written tale with some of the best worldbuilding seen in recent memory. The characters are vividly portrayed, each with their own distinctive personalities and complexities. The depiction of differing cultures and beliefs across the world adds a rich layer of authenticity to the setting. Demiurg stands out as a compelling villain, raising the stakes to an epic scale that draws the reader in deeply.

However, the story's linearity and the lack of a truly satisfying ending prevent it from reaching its full potential. While the philosophical depth and the intricate world are impressive, the limited agency and the unresolved ending leave a sense of missed opportunity.

Despite these flaws, The End of Creation remains a noteworthy read, especially for those who appreciate complex characters, rich worldbuilding, and philosophical explorations within their fantasy narratives. 7/8

The highest praise I can offer this storygame is that I took a break from playing Red Dead Redemption 2 to read it. Here's what I love about reading Malk's works: of course the choices are fun and even in a shortish game there's some interesting branching, but this game--like the very best of Malk's games, takes the time to give his world and his prose texture.

There's real time spent here thinking about how to evoke place and exotic culture; how to slow down the narration and revel in description and bits of dialogue that are meant to get across character, not just jerk the plot along like an ox in a yoke. This game is about the language and about masterful writing as much as the choices. I've read a lot of Malk's work, and this is the best one I've read so far. The figurative language in particular: that doesn't happen easily. I can see the hard work put into the craft here. Which were my favorite moments of prose? Weighing like a knight's greathelm on his head. The quibbling between "adjustment" and "ordeal." It is said they can't be killed. "Was said." Don't make me pick my favorite.

I thought the hunting of the she-elf was a fun and creepy branch; I would have loved one more branch in there, one more choice to make to draw it out and make that bit a touch more interactive--when the arrows start flying, perhaps? Some tactical choice to make. But of course, I wanted lots of more of everything.

This is of course, in addition to Malk's usual wit and smuggling in the big ideas in a fast-paced action-adventure.

And because I can't resist a pedantic comment: it's "parley" and not "parlay" in spite of how people pronounce it.

The story does a good job of building on A Prayer For Destruction's story. This has definitely left me wanting for more details, particularly as to the nature of the empowering voice that strengthens your characters now and then. I really hope there will be more to come.

Not bad

There's something about Malk's prose that is so solemn, so irresistibly magnetic, that it draws you into the worldbuilding effortlessly.

The End of Creation and A Prayer for Destruction are, while set in the same world, different in nature. Contrary to when you played Julian, Basem is undoubtably weaker in battle. You tread more carefully as Basem, choosing your battles. To a degree, I might prefer it to the immovable, satisfying strength of A Prayer for Destruction.

The End of Creation also cements this setting by providing much deeper and vaster worldbuilding, expanding the scope of the stories.

I wait eagerly for the next sequel, and I absolutely recommend this to readers.

Very, very well-written. I truly enjoyed the prose and writing. The descriptions and details really drew me into the story, I did feel immersed in it. The details and descriptions also helped as I traveled, revealing and showing the world around. It was quite enjoyable.

Fun choices, as well. Each one had me thinking about the possibilities that would occur should I choose one over the other. There were clear reasons and support to pick each one (supported by the story previously), so it was difficult to choose just one. I must have made some good choices, my first time through I became a prophet of the Almighty.

I did go back and read a few other paths. They do diverge quite a bit, as might have been guessed by the choices. It was very enjoyable from all directions (even if I did end up dying more than once).