Player Comments on The Lost Island

A fairly enjoyable storygame :)

The writing in this was decent enough, although I noticed that it was a bit linear. Also, some of the dialogue switched from third person to first, and that didn't really do much for the sense of immersion as I read. This game was rather short but I do appreciate that effort that's here, as I didn't find myself finding anything too glaringly obvious as far as any potential problems go. So good job on proofreading and overall care to your game.

One aspect that also made this storygame better in the long run were the pictures. They added life to the writing and fit together nicely with the overall plot, never feeling out of place as to what was happening in the story.

Still, this was rather short for a storygame that's about survival on a island. There was some challenge here, but the overall challenge doesn't last long when this game's length is taken into account. Although this isn't a game with the most depth, it's still one with some rather decent writing in it.

At the end of the day I enjoyed this, so great work.
-- TharaApples on 3/18/2017 12:13:22 AM with a score of 0
This game was pretty good and fun!
-- Portal on 12/30/2020 11:48:59 AM with a score of 0
Nice little romp. There was some errors and the like but on the whole, not too shabby.
-- tmanaking on 11/18/2020 11:31:57 PM with a score of 0
Short adventure within a day of someone's life. Nice story.
-- dewikhami on 11/4/2020 11:22:45 AM with a score of 0
It's a good story with a good plot, but there aren't many places where you can make important decisions. Mostly, it's just press for the next day or press to go back to the beach. Other than that, it's a good story overall.
-- Mermaids22 on 1/19/2020 5:31:25 PM with a score of 0
You are a decent writer. You have clearly point some effort into making a good story.

The story is short and has loads of scope for more depth, but you know how to construct prose better than a lot of the authors on this site.
-- Jordi P on 4/5/2018 11:35:56 AM with a score of 0
-- DetroitShani313 on 1/2/2018 3:59:06 AM with a score of 0
This was quite fun! A bit simple but enjoyable if you want a quick storygame.
-- Saika on 3/10/2017 4:46:38 PM with a score of 0
its awesome but maybe a little bit longer
-- Masterodemolition on 2/15/2017 3:12:58 PM with a score of 0
Good, but maybe if it was a bit longer...
-- ZombieGamer9188 on 2/14/2017 7:58:22 PM with a score of 0
5/8 Not a bad story. It was very short for at least my choices. I didn't pick anything bad so not sure if there are bad consequences or not. It entertained me, so not bad!
-- JinDary on 2/12/2016 2:14:09 PM with a score of 0
Not bad at all.
-- Penworth on 6/12/2015 11:46:42 AM with a score of 0
Well I got eaten by a pack of hyenas, so I don't really know that much about what happens. :P
-- Creature on 4/10/2015 7:48:28 AM with a score of 0
This was really fun!
-- Firestar on 10/4/2014 1:51:18 PM with a score of 0
I rated it a 6/8. I think it really has potential, but it needs to be longer. You're a good writer, as in you really know how to structure a sentence well, and I wanted to get to know more of the adventure, it was just over too soon. :-)
-- Guest on 6/27/2014 7:01:59 AM with a score of 0
ok I guess
-- Scrappydoo1996 on 5/22/2014 3:23:55 PM with a score of 0
Good game, short, nice flow to it though.
-- BurningPen on 3/29/2014 12:49:59 PM with a score of 0
This was a bit depressing and boring, but I can't say it was too bad.
-- ck23838 on 9/4/2013 9:12:12 AM with a score of 0
one of the shortest storys i have seen no such nothing just a waste of time
-- why on 7/13/2013 1:30:22 PM with a score of 0
It was pretty ok, I rated a 4/8.
-- SethIsBeast on 6/3/2013 3:28:12 PM with a score of 0
Interesting but very short
-- Salamander on 3/26/2013 9:58:16 PM with a score of 0
it was pretty good, at least you put some effort and you tryed
-- brettthefox on 3/26/2013 7:25:06 PM with a score of 0
Awesomeness Approves!
Well, it was good, for the most part. There's nothing I can say that has already been said, but this is a lot better than the new stories that have been flooding in now a days.
-- awesomeness1242 on 3/16/2013 2:10:06 PM with a score of 0
-- nerd7001 on 3/2/2013 2:48:06 PM with a score of 0
Well, the writing was ok, the length was just nice, not dragged out or whatever, and the story was ok. Not the worst game.
-- Xt1000305 on 3/1/2013 8:58:05 PM with a score of 0
needs more choices.
-- pennywise on 3/1/2013 12:06:55 PM with a score of 0
Really simple and had no depth to the character, but it was still kinda fun.
-- Briar_Rose on 2/28/2013 7:32:52 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good but really really short for a survival game
-- hugo23 on 2/27/2013 10:58:34 PM with a score of 0
This was okay. 4
-- Endrew on 2/27/2013 9:56:33 PM with a score of 0
Yup, completely unrealistic (pumas live in mountains fer gerd's shake) and completely not worth my time.
-- Swiftstryker on 2/27/2013 2:06:24 AM with a score of 0
At one point (one of the pages about the Puma), you shift your pronouns from 'he' to 'you.' Also, you might consider making some of the choices Robinson makes within the text decisions that the player can make (where/when/how/with what to make shelter, etc.) just to add more "survival" bits in.
-- WaywardGirl on 2/26/2013 10:21:14 PM with a score of 0
This was pretty good.
-- Kuii on 2/26/2013 1:29:31 PM with a score of 0
Kinda linear, but a good start. Develop this idea more and this game could be really, really cool.
-- MagmaArmor0 on 2/26/2013 1:26:58 AM with a score of 0
First, I found it interesting that you decided to write this in third person instead of second person. Most people go the "you" route. However I found that the paths were lacking in diversity.
-- Mynoris on 2/26/2013 12:13:41 AM with a score of 0
I made it out alive!

Short and simple game.

You can make the game more difficult by adding items for the inventory. Also, since you were in a plane, you might wanna add some people or cast in the game who have vital roles. Either they'll help you, or pull you down. Bringing up the "survival of the fittest" in life.
-- toni on 2/25/2013 10:18:25 PM with a score of 0
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