Mystery / Puzzle
, #16 for
played 1,406 times (finished 127)
"no possible way to lose"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.
You are trapped in a white room. Find a way out, no matter how preposterous it might be.
It had its ups and downs i'd say.
The writing was really good and the plot was well executed. I could easily picture the situations because you provided a decent amount of detail. So well done with that.
Sadly, there are some flaws here to weigh the good writing down a bit. I thought the storygame was rather random, and the choices didn't seem to make much sense to me. But I suppose it might be hard trying to imagine choices in the situations the character was in for this story.
There is a small amount of character development, but I would have liked to get to know them more. Developed, well fleshed out characters are a very important part of storywriting.
I also found the storygame rather short, despite the decent amount of writing on most of the pages.
This also feels rather incomplete, and I don't have a sense of closure after I read it. I really want to know what happens next.
4/8, good job but fix the flaws please.
on 3/25/2017 12:51:33 AM with a score of 0
This was a really cool experience!
on 8/9/2020 1:22:06 PM with a score of 0
This was a really cool experience!
on 8/9/2020 1:22:05 PM with a score of 0
I had fun with this. Creative and it kept my attention. I'd love to see more.
-- G on 4/1/2020 1:35:29 PM with a score of 0
on 1/23/2020 11:37:37 PM with a score of 0
I was confused but good job
on 3/2/2019 12:12:12 PM with a score of 0
I really like this game! It's creative and refreshing. Even though it's rather short, it still feels complete. I love the ending - I've always been a fan of tragedies/stories where the protagonist doesn't win.
If there were a fault to this, I'd say it lies in the only ending you have. Not that the ending was bad, but that it was the only one. It would have been nice to see an ending where you can't get out of the white room, or anything else you could come up with. I'm left curious as to what will happen next, which isn't a bad thing, but in replaying it and looking at everything there is, it's just boring in the sense that there's nothing new you can find.
That said, this story is anything but boring! It's very descriptive and even has a bit of humor to it. I do really like it and I hope that maybe one day you'll make a second? Though, you don't have to. As said, I'm just curious for more.
on 12/31/2018 2:18:47 AM with a score of 0
Pure twist. I love it. Hope you can make a sequel or add more modifications to it.
on 5/6/2017 1:02:12 AM with a score of 0
Hi there! :-). Great story! You are so creative... I feel this game has the potential to be even greater. After all, there are no limmits to the imagination! :-) :-). My idea is: the next time the girl finds herself in the white room (after she's been sedated again), there could be a message on the wall, giving her clue as to what's going on. Like the kind of message you'd find on a map for a treasure chest. Just a thought. Good luck, and happy developing! :-). Oh, and very well done again. This was certainly one of your most creative ideas. :-).
-- Rahila on 5/5/2017 10:34:23 AM with a score of 0
on 4/27/2017 4:38:25 AM with a score of 0
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