AgentX, The Contributor
"Time for my hourly dose of devil's water."
Hello, viewer. In case you were wondering, I don't look like Kermit the Frog.
Considering the fact that my writing speed is comparable to that of a fast snail, I usually spend my time rating and commenting on stories here (not that I'll get any more featured).
Anyways, if you care to discuss about most topics, fire a PM whenever you see that guy called AgentX online.
"There is nothing more unequal than the equal treatment of unequal people." -Tommy Jefferson
Pinging, ringing, zinging, and kabooming cloud everything. For an eyeblink in time the smoke clears and the ground, a literal lattice of bodies, provides a horrific but all-too-common site...in 1944.
Not only is this my first storygame, it is also the first in my potentially new Alternate Reality Series (in which time will judge whether I'll take up the nerve to work on or not).
My entry for the Chaos Contest.
NOTE: This is historical fiction, and as such there WILL be inaccuracies compared to reality. And though one can die in the story more than he or she can live, that's because this presents the many could-be struggles of a soldier in an alternate version of the D-Day Invasion.
Exploding, fighting, killing and firing cloud everything. For an eyeblink in time the smoke clears and the ground, a massive massacre of men, provides a horrific but then-too-common site...in 1944.
In an alternate version of the original story, step into the combat boots of a platoon leader, and try to survive the furies of a well-informed and well-prepared enemy.
NOTE: This is historical fiction, and as such there WILL be inaccuracies if compared to the real life events this is based on. As for the readers, you don't need to read the first story to be able to understand this one, though doing so will result in a little more insight into this storygame.
It wasn't something you ever dreamed about, and it certainly wasn't something you wanted to get involved in. But when the government asks, people have to answer.
And now, you struggle for acceptance as a trainee under a bunch blacker than CIA. Will your application for employment be a success, or will the 'job interview' cost you something bad?
Recent PostsOne sentence description on 6/6/2017 7:28:50 AM
An Average Joe is forced to pass an apprenticeship entry exam for a team of "firemen".
Won't be going out in a long while, though.
Morality test Mark II on 5/28/2017 2:35:59 AM
1. Yes. Considering that they share the same body but think separately, this is still a form of sexual assault since it affects someone.
2. No, only the bad head should. However, unless there is some way of limiting the extent of an induced coma, there is no way to punish the bad head without hurting the good head.
3. Yes. They all think separately, they should allow the unwilling head to cockblock herself.
Morality test Mark II on 5/28/2017 12:20:06 AM
1. The man is the least evil. He was only forcibly dragged into the whole mess by the faces in the first place. And the only reason he burned down the house and killed 3 witnesses is because he had had enough of it. He became evil because of the faces.
Faces, Serial Killer, and Hitler follow.
Faces are second least evil because they are the reason why hundreds of lives were saved, and though they include a serial killer and Hitler, the faces ate Hitler and planned to eat Serial Killer as well. This, however, is countered by the fact that because of the faces, the man killed three people and burned down a house.
Serial Killer gets the runner-up award, because...he kills. He keeps murdering people, so that's a bad thing. He, however, is not as bad if you compare to the most evil among them:
Hitler's the most evil because even though his life was saved because of the man, he still stays with his Anti-Semitic instincts and tries to prove the man's a devil worshiper. Ungrateful bastard.
2a. 2, 5, 4, 1, 3
2 because all words and no actions, though his words constitute entirely as hate speech so I'll give him that.
5 because he at least kidnaps heroes.
4 because even if he doesn't kidnap heroes, he still gives a ton of people a ton of headaches with his simple yet heinous deeds. Certainly a lego prankster sounds more evil than a man which gives himself ice cream for free.
1 because though he doesn't kill anybody, he intends to, with his inflatable sex toys. Murderous goal drives him this high up the list.
3 wins because he steals cash and threatens the kids of the guards with molestation. Even if he doesn't follow through, he exploits the psychological weaknesses of the guards, and that's just downright evil.
2b. Hero 4, because he kills by sweet music, which can shatter just about any eardrums due to its pitch. What a badass.
2c. 5, 4, 1, 3, 2
5 because he's just an average Joe.
4 because though he kills, he does not know it, and besides, he's pitiful. He only wants to play music with his indestructible clarinet.
1 because he at least has a crimefighting sense, though he never arrests criminals, only kills them.
3 because he's a misguided war veteran who believes that everything is a big government conspiracy or something. He doesn't fight for justice too.
2 wins because he's a serial murderer who suffocates people in bags made of skinned baby faces. Brutal bastard.
3a. Nope. The other head has a mind and personality of its own, so I'll consider her as a separate person, even if she shares the body with the head-GF.
3b. As stated, both are independently thinking individuals, so that makes them separate individuals...kinda. So they won't be raping each other, mentally speaking. No, it's consensual.
3c. Physically speaking, still rape, because the other head doesn't want to partake of the intercourse.
3d. Not chaste at all. The person still sexed the body. They're also no longer vegetarian because the meat eaten by the other head nourishes both of them because they're connected, so the once-vegetarian head was nourished by meat indirectly.
3e. Yes because they don't want the sex.
Chaos Contest Results on 5/18/2017 6:01:07 AM
Hats off to the triumphant ones!
Chaos Contest Link Thread on 5/3/2017 8:37:03 PM
WIBN is surely in the top three.
Draw My Attention (Age of Apples) on 5/1/2017 6:13:18 PM
I think I saw him commenting like that on Ford's storygame too.
Draw My Attention (Age of Apples) on 5/1/2017 3:08:07 AM
Recommending a comment for featuring:
I felt the story lacked depth and a greater meaning. Also, the most interesting aspects of the story were left unexplored.
How did the Germans learn of D-Day?
In history they were utterly convinced that the landing would be at Calais, headed by Patton. The false intelligence and fake inflatable army the Allies used worked to perfection, so this could have been an awesome opportunity to explore a shocking mole operation or Benedict Arnold level betrayal within the Allied ranks. But sadly, we just get the generic, "someone told them" that forces a plot artificially.
How did the Allies manage to muster a force 15x greater than the already colossal D-Day invasion - AFTER - losing every single man and machinery save one?
Nothing about that is really plausible. But having the D-Day invasion fail and having the player try to help win the war regardless would have been an interesting concept if it was done more believably.
What happened to the paratroopers that dropped behind enemy lines?
Surely they would have had some impact on the story.
Overall, it wasn't a bad attempt for a first story. And the writing was competent. But the lack of meaning and the failure to maintain suspension of disbelief makes the story lackluster.
-- Bucky on 4/29/2017 9:01:43 AM
Selfie thread on 4/25/2017 6:26:46 PM
Who knows, Seto is one of the unexpected ones.
Selfie thread on 4/25/2017 6:06:04 PM
Bah! "High standards"? Nope, i was saying about his physical appearance, not the damned sweatshirt.
Selfie thread on 4/25/2017 5:33:50 PM
This "full butch" looks more like some skinny guy than a female.