well, I'm sorry that I'm late. Traffic was terrible.
I don't think "or so you thought" is a complete sentence. There is also an "and" smashed against the comma (just a missing space).
Is the main character named Jay? Also, am I the main character? This description implies that "I" and "Jay" are two different people to me. If that is what you intended, that is fine. However, your description says that I am Jay.
Starting a sentence is an ellipse is strange (an ellipse is the three periods in a row). Usually that symbol replaces a period or comma, but you have it at the start of a paragraph. I would connect that to the previous sentence.
That is my quick take. This also reads like a story description or teaser rather than a hook. To me, a hook is something interesting or exciting that happens early in the story to draw the reader in. A hook makes the reader want to keep reading your story. A description gives them a general idea what it is about so they can decide to read it (or not).