A tale of love and hate..

Player Rating4.57/8

"#224 overall, #14 for 2014"
based on 110 ratings since 12/17/2014
played 3,827 times (finished 162)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Love cannot be spoken about. It can only be felt. Almost everyone has fallen in love and loved but not everyone is lucky to be loved. Through this story you play through the lives of two individuals merged by a bond of forever love. Understand what it is to love, to be pained and to be loved. This is my first storygame. The story is a little linear because it is more a story than a choose your adventure game however their are three different endings.

Player Comments

Although this story was well written, it's very different from the typical CYOA found on this site- not that that's necessarily a bad thing!

For me, the main issues were spacing, length of paragraphs, and lack of choice (I only came across two real decisions).

Concerning the first two, to give you an idea: when I originally opened this story, I was immediately taken aback by the huge paragraphs on the page. I often found myself skimming through lines- but not because the story was boring. I only did so because of the gargantuan size they ended up accumulating to. I would recommend that, if you were to make a story in the future, you used proper spacing- it's a great way to convey emotion and separate ideas.

As for choice, you have to remember that this site *is* called "Choose your Story"! When there are only three endings that you have to offer- as you say in your summary- the story becomes very linear- as you also happen to say. This would not be an issue if the choices weren't so... clear, for lack of a better word. When choices immediately lead to cookie-cutter endings, it becomes quite bland. It also makes the reader feel like the true ending is Helena's- which is something you don't want to do. Try to make each choice feel solid.

However, apart from this, the only flaws I could find were an underuse of commas where needed, and not separating the dialogue with spacing. Be that as it may be, this is still one of the better stories on this site. I congratulate you on writing it, and give it a 5/8.

:)
-- jamBuster on 3/11/2017 1:29:54 PM with a score of 0
Wow. I was completely caught off guard on the first page simply because of how long it was! I had to change my thought process from the "fast-paced" decisions to more "story-based" decisions. When I made the switch, though, I really enjoyed the story. It was well written and, of course, I'm a sucker for love so my opinion is a bit biased. *wink*
-- MysteriousMystery on 3/15/2017 5:17:43 PM with a score of 0
This is a very nice game, I don't mind the long paragraphs. I loved the way this was written, and the endings which you could choose.
-- Shinobi on 3/13/2017 1:13:07 PM with a score of 0
Thank you for the beautiful story. I haven't been lucky in love and, therefore, don't read romantic stuff. But...I read your story and liked it. :)
-- Quorrah on 2/26/2017 11:21:36 PM with a score of 0
Really good teaches that true love isn't like the illusions of society and isn't about lust or greed and true love leads to true happiness
-- Frank on 6/22/2016 11:02:54 PM with a score of 0
lovely fantastic romantic amazing story line loved it
-- fellow person on 1/20/2016 7:16:07 PM with a score of 0
Amazing just amazing, in the routes that left Ferdinand with someone else other than Helen I felt so sad for Helen especially Nicole's Route.

You are A great Writer.
-- Luna Celest on 10/21/2015 7:01:14 AM with a score of 0
so nice >_<
-- L4IK4H on 9/28/2015 6:26:56 PM with a score of 0
Very well done, not too many choices but it was a very good story :)
-- Takozilla on 6/21/2015 5:49:38 AM with a score of 0
It was simple, realistic and yet very enchanting :)
-- IszadeLeon on 6/11/2015 12:43:11 PM with a score of 0
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